The blood that flows through my veins is not actually mine, it is someone else's blood.
The blood of another person.
The blood of an innocent, delicious person.
Why do I kill, you may ask.
I kill because I need to sustain my life.
I kill because I enjoy the hunt.
I kill because I like the high I get when I take a life.
I kill because I like the blood trail on my lips after a kill.
I kill because I like it.
The blood that flows through my veins is not actually mine, it is someone else's blood.
A contest entry
- For The Vampire Lovers! by VampyreAnna.
400 points, ended September 27, 6 entries
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Comments
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This is a good poem! I don't think repeating yourself at the end is necessary. I also think you could word sentences a little differently than saying "the" or "I kill". I do like all the description you use. I would suggest you saying "The blood that flows through my veins is not actually mine, it is someone else's blood, another person's blood, an innocent, delicious person's blood," but that is just a suggestion! Use some variety and spice it up! Other than that great job! Thanks for sharing and good luck!
God bless,
Bri
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