we started our weekend getaway
with a game of cards
of truth or dare
by the shore
having a losing hand
and that stare...
on my shoulders, bare...
in my sun dress
water droplets from the surf
like strand of pearls
on my collarbone
tentatively,caressed them
with his thumb
ignoring my raised eyebrow
"I think I have you playing right in my hand,"
I heard myself say...
and I grinned.
and "Hmm," was his only reply
and smiled as he moved even closer to me.
Author notes
This reminds me of the 'Pearl' poem I wrote for Nicolette... 
picture credit: Sensual by ~weight0ftheworld on deviantart.com
A contest entry
- suprisingly sensual. by And Hyetal.
900 points, ended November 3, 15 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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hi Anna salamat sa comment. this one so sensual hehehe...you know its hard for me to write something erotic or sensual...don't have any experience pa kasi eh hehehe. haun...masaya talaga ang site na 2, sabihin man ng iba na corny, basta, aztig teu heheheh!
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Hi Ische
di mo naman siguro kailangan ng experience para sumulat nito...pero hirap din ako sa style na'to.
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And sensual it is! Loved how you built the scene and the moves. Right pace here to make the readers enjoy the poem.
Ah, you in the ocean having fun did inspire you so well.
Simply lovely
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Thank you Mari...I was thinking if I have to label it Sensual...these are really just silly thoughts in my head...hehe.
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Very good--a sweet read--you naile it.
bw
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Oooh
"Hmm, was his only reply
and smiled as he moved even closer to me"
So what happens next?
nah, best left a mystery, better that way, lol
Nice write Anna, i see you slowly gettin your muse back.
Ken
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Thank you Ken...like you I am trying to write something like this...I've been writing some parts of this for days and saw the contest and yours too...get me to be inspired...hehe
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Oh i still have the pearl poem you wrote me, bookmarked, Anna Lee - indeed a precious jewel
. This poem does indeed remind me of your poem - it's just as beautiful and loving.
Great to see you posting more poems, lovely one!! I was at the beach yesterday....so I could really dive into your one!
~ Nicolette
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Thank you Nicolette
I went swimming too this weekend with my cousins...I'm still in that mode...kinda stuck up too lol...of how the water feels. -
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jaaaa i know the feeling (especially when one has to work, lol). i went to the beach with my children and dogs but didn't swim...there's still a bit of winter in the air here and the water is still too cold!!
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