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Theosophy *

"Human consciousness is the first neuron of the Universe coming to
life and awareness"  **


Black Hole ***
Universe
Consciousness
Appears

Light
Sparks
Darkness
Fades

Clouds
Form
Rains
Descend

Ameba
Appears


Author notes

* http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Theosophy

** p 293, from "The Footprints of God", by Greg Iles
Pocket Star Books, div. of Simon & Schuster
Copyright 2003 by Greg Iles
0-7434-5414-6

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Footprints_of_God

*** http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Black_hole

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  • hawkeslake gold member
    October 18

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    Tight and concise -- the background simply enhances the thought lighting up the poem. As always, I leave in a contemplative mood. Very effective writing.

    • Striders Bar - silver member
      October 18
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      Thank you for your thoughtful comment; compliments and applause. I do appreciate them.

  • Capitaine Rouge
    October 13
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    Wow, I love it! Good word choice, and I like the shape of this poem! The way you wrote this piece sounds so sophisticated, lol!

    • Striders Bar - silver member
      October 13
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      Thank you for your comment; compliments and applause for I do appreciate them.

  • char13
    October 10
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    This is so, so cool!

    keep it up!
    • Striders Bar - silver member
      October 10
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      Thanks for the comment; compliment and encouragement. I do appreciate them and the cheering section as well.

  • EarthToJim
    September 23

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    Perhaps brevity is becoming the soul of poetry as well as wit! This reads well except for the easily fixable "Amoeba" typo.

    • Striders Bar - silver member
      October 10
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      Thanks for the implied compliment; comment and applause. I do appreciate them.

  • Confusedboy gold member
    September 23

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    hahaha, like the way you made your presentation. Does this mean the earth is the center of the Universe? Just wondering. lol.

    • Striders Bar - silver member
      September 23
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      Nah,. Copernicus, proved that theory wrong centuries ago. (lol) Thanks for your humorous comment, and applause, for I do appreciate them.

      • EarthToJim
        September 23
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        If space is infinite, then any point might be considered "the center"!

  • Woodchuck4400 silver member
    September 23

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    Very nice. I like this alot. I am always surprised by the breadth of your subject matter.

    Great job.

    Mike

    • Striders Bar - silver member
      September 23
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      Thank you for your comment; compliments and applause. I do appreciate them.

  • Nermin Nazim
    September 23

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    I LOOOOVE IT

    Why to I feel relief reading it?
    the way I look at it, my way, with darkness fading giving way to life and the the clouds that become rain, the good, leaving the ameboa aside. I love it from start to end, my way too

    • Striders Bar - silver member
      September 23
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      Thanks for your comments; compliments and applause. I do appreciate them.
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