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Falling

Falling down
This death feels great
No more crowns
No royal gates
They're all just clowns
With mouths at gape
In death they'll drown
All by hate.

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  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    September 27

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    welcome to all poetry

    this flows truly beautifully really emphasing the topic of the p[oem. You have used some wonderful phrasing to create imagery and life that captures the reader. well done and welcome to the site

    Charlotte
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  • MCR biggest fan
    September 27
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    Falling

    This poem was so GOOD! I loved it.

  • luna-midnight gold member
    September 27

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    this flows very well, and i really like it alot
    i woudlnt know anything to change
    keep writitng, and takecare
    Stephanei ♥
  • worthless life101
    September 27
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    hey
    its a good write keep up the good work