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Mind Cogs Eye Wheels

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Dedicated to those who think and see!

 

 

Time passes in the blink of an eye,
Mind cogs turn so fast they fly..

We see what we want to see,
He hear what we want to hear, me...

We transfix on what mesmerizes,
The mind is busy with all devises..

Cogs turn time into motion,
The mind running away wreaks commotion..

What do we want to see in our minds eye?
Fantasy and all we desire not pass us by..

When we are about to die,
Our pupil vertically narrows why?

Squeezing the life out of us as we pass,
Over into another time and dimensional mass..

Time goes nowhere we live not forever,
Better make the most of life our endeavour..

There is no thirteen O'clock,
But twelve is allowed to tick tock..

We clock up many experiences in life,
From birth to wooden overcoat its strife...

In the twinkling of ones eye comes change,
At times can be ever so strange!

Roman numerals and bold numericals,
Mark the clock faces eye like monacles..

What makes us tick you may well ask,
As life deals us another challenge to task..

Tick tock tick tock, tick tock,
Eyes scrutinize the eternal clock..

 

Tick tock round and round the eternity clock,

To nowhere fast no exchange nothing to hock.

 

She keeps time in her minds eye and head,
From the time she gets up to going to bed!

Us, we, he, them, you me,
We see what we want we to be.

Time waits for no man,
Make the most of time whilst you can.

Time ran out on life for me,
It is timeless now for all eternity.

 

 

Copyright:K:September 2008

Author notes



This is a sketch on surrealist thinking out aloud.

Option: 4. 13oclock Chosen for this poem.

Picture credit: 3oclock by =budgie
http://budgie.deviantart.com/art/13oclock-85890774



Picture depicts:
An eye set into the cogs of an clock and its face.

 

 

Allpoetry.com Contest
September 2008
Pictures && Prompts [you know you want to click -don't deny]
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2422357
Rules:
1. No love. Please. Why? Look at HER username.
2. I'd much much rather if you didn't praise religion. No
offense to the religious.
3. No emo. End of discussion.
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5. Swearing is okay. Every other word is a curse word = not okay.
6. You may enter more than one - BUT with different options.
7. NO CRAP LIKE THIS. oR lIkE Th1s mAdNeSs. And definitely
none of this contrast nonsense.
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Comments

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  • I felt that you constricted yourself too much by having rhymes in two line stanzas. I didn't notice the rhyme in the beginning which was good, but then the two line stanzas made me more aware of it and eventually, the rhymes started feeling forced.

    There is room for improvement.

  • GreenHrtPaleMoon gold member
    October 21

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    Whimsical and intellectual simultaneously. I truly loved all the various pics you used in this piece. Very beautifully presented.


  • princess Jewelcat22
    September 30

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    This is so true!!! You did a most excellent job portraying this poem!!! Great details and description!!! You are a fabulous writer!!! This is so beautifully written!!! This is truly a piece to be proud of!! I love it!!

    • Kazytc gold member
      September 30

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      Thanks millions!

      Awww Thanks millions, for your fab and kind review you are very inspiring and encouraging.
      Glad you liked it.
      Best of luck in all of your contests, hope you win Gold in them all.
      Poetic Hugs and Thanks Millions,
      Kaz.
      Kazytc xx

  • Violinstrings
    September 28

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    wonderful

    grest job very expressive wonderfull use of words and rhythm every thought was so right on target with feelings


    • Kazytc gold member
      September 30
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      Thanks millions!

      Awww Thanks millions, for your fab and kind review you are very inspiring and encouraging.
      Glad you liked it.
      Best of luck in all of your contests, hope you win Gold in them all.
      Poetic Hugs and Thanks Millions,
      Kaz.
      Kazytc xx

  • Reptile Lady gold member
    September 28

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    Your thoughts always amaze me in words that are deeply spoken in poetry.
    Best wishes to you hun
    Julie


    • Kazytc gold member
      September 30
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      Thanks millions Julie!

      Awww Thanks millions Julie, for your fab and kind review you are very inspiring and encouraging.
      Glad you liked it.
      Best of luck in all of your contests, hope you win Gold in them all.
      Poetic Hugs and Thanks Millions,
      Kaz.
      Kazytc xx

    • Kazytc gold member
      September 28
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      Thanks millions!

      Awww Thanks millions, for your fab and kind review you are very inspiring and encouraging.
      Glad you liked it.
      Best of luck in all of your contests, hope you win Gold in them all.
      Poetic Hugs and Thanks Millions,
      Kaz.
      Kazytc xx


  • Puppydog gold member
    September 27

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    WONDERFUL!!!

    To enjoy life now, just live for today! This seems so hard to do as this world keeps us all stressed out and up tight, striving to get ahead.


    • Kazytc gold member
      September 28
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      Thanks millions!

      Awww Thanks millions, for your fab and kind review you are very inspiring and encouraging.
      Glad you liked it.
      Best of luck in all of your contests, hope you win Gold in them all.
      Poetic Hugs and Thanks Millions,
      Kaz.
      Kazytc xx
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