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under the moon

walking the nero path,seeking others in the way no one can see my face blind to the world and you sir say i'm alive well i belive i'm dead to this earth

all night in the darkest room playing songs on the rusted piano keys
will you sing a tune God knows i'll be dead soon and if the moon is out tonight me and you will have no fright

and you sir sand up and ask me what is wrong as if it wasn't on your face, you sir are a disgrace disgusting is what you are and i love secretly and hate you and love you lovingly

and i cry every night your always by my side sleeping soundly by the clock i'll guard you thew the night watch me in the hallway as i kill
myself today bury me under the moon and i will always love you

and as i kill myself to day promise me you wont hate me thewout your days because i'll be with you under the moon walking that same nero path kisssng you beyond the twilight i'll will finally be in the night

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  • evilangel311
    September 30
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    Wow

    It seems to build up to a climax in the final paragraph with a sort of intensity, I love it =]