Her heart is broken
The guns to her head
Her finger’s on the trigger
So soon she’ll be dead
Her pulse is erratic
She’s shaking with fear
Pressure on the trigger
She’s doing this here
The thud of a body
The word on her tongue
The sound of the gun
It’s second to none
Her eyes are vacant
Her heart so still
Her veins run dry
And she’s gone downhill
Author notes
the title is much more fitting now i think.
first thoughts when you read it?
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Yeah, people usually do die if they're dead.
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awwww, this is really really great, but i dont think the title matches it, so maybe you should change the title to something more sutible....but even if you dont its still a very very wonderful poem
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suggestion to a new title? im not keen on naming things permanantly anyway.
they always change. give me an idea i'll see what i can do
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well im not sure, maybe you could do something like "Her Final Escape" Or something along those lines, to make it fit the poem a bit better.
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I really like this poem.
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thank you, its taken me for ages to get the courage to put it up. ive never been happy with it. glad you liked it
thanks
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