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Squabbling

We argued on this form to no avail
With purposes that crossed yet never met
The poets that we quoted never cared
And yet we aired opinions anyway

I took a stand and others disagreed
Without a need the battle lines were drawn
The escalation kept the site amused
More words were used than in a Shakespeare play

Then one or two appeared to make us laugh
And make me see the silly sight I made
So rather than dispute the wrongs and rights
I'll laugh about the way that I behaved

I find unrhymed a sonnet doesn't gel
But what the hell I'll write one anyway


Author notes

I know Laura said it doesn't have to be IP but she didn't say it couldn't be

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  • GreenHrtPaleMoon gold member
    October 15

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    *grins despite himself* Yes, well there was alot of impassioned discussion going on wasn't there? This was very well writ with solid measure (which I can never seem to achieve) and a clever topic. Well done.


  • CitrineSunrise
    October 4

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    As you undoubtedly know, ten syllable iambic pentameter is called blank verse. Laura's version gives the writer the freedom to explore the sonnet syllable count without the constrictions of meter. The beauty of poetry is the ability to express our thoughts in many varied forms, rhyming and non rhyming. You are always able to execute a perfect poem, even if you need some cheese with your whine. Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz

  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    October 4

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    You are too much. Very clever indeed.

    Well done by the way but then....you knew that. ~Pamela


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    September 30
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    Wonderfully done.
    A NON RHYMING SONNET. Okay
    and you thought *tory styles* where
    too much. Ah well, you nailed it.

    Best wishes in the contest
    Love you

    Tory


  • sheltered
    September 30
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    lol

    I thought it gelled rather well.


  • Myjoy gold member
    September 30

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    Hummmmmm well the poem I thought was fun, and funny. Yet I read the comments below and I am at lost. LOL
    Good luck Jeff.


  • Amera gold member
    September 30
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    I guess this rhymes quite well to an Englishman. hehe... I do like it!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    September 30
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    I don't even know what's going on!


    • PassionsPromise gold member
      September 30

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      LMAO I am with you here unique one looking at the comments I am just going to leave casually as if I NEVER been here..well i may leave one. This one. HAHA

      s
  • Alpha-Q
    September 30

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    I take exception to the trite crap remark! Who gave ea permission to upgrade your writing to that? Ha ha ha ha ha. ea is, however, a world class expert on trite crap, having written so much of it, after review I will trust the judgment.

    What a wonderful trick you have played using end words that rhyme in England but an American who speaks properly would never know. Very clever.


    • cricketjeff gold member
      September 30
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      Where did you find an American who could speak properly?
      • Alpha-Q
        September 30
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        Most do. We aren't fond of abusing words with non-dictionary pronunciations over here.

  • ea silver member
    September 30

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    This is actually much better than the trite crap you usually write. Your argument falls flat on its face but I shall leave you to your pseudo academic literary sciolisms.

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