The universe is too vast to view
Except by an enlightened few
And they then describe what they see
To help the likes of you and me.
The cosmos follows some powerful plan
Far greater than the thoughts of man.
Yet in that plan we play a part
Thanks to the Almighty’s open heart.
Author notes
This was inspired by a piece on this site from Poetryality
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4632641
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Was talking about rhymes with PK and saw your name online. What better page to find rhymes than here, right?
This poem has a very soft feel, and the rhymes added more softness to it. Even part/heart that usually come as a 'hard' sound, worked well as last lines rhymes.
Nicely done!
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Thanks Marie. I hope you got a chance to see Renee's poem which inspired this (link in notes box).
Jim
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Jim, As a believer in a Creator I find it curious that as those who build bigger telescopes and rocket ships try to find the origin of the universe, the universe seems to get that much bigger and more complex.
Thanks for the poem.
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Good Write!
sHORT AND SWEET
i Love it! Beautifully written, good job on the rhyme scheme. it's all amazing!
Nicely written
and thanks so much for sharing this poem.
Glenn
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Thanks for those kind words Glen.
Jim
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A very nice poem. congreatulations!
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Many Thanks.
Jim
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short,sweet and sublime
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Sublime
I like that.
Thanks f:
Jim
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That was cute.
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Thank You JK
Jim
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This is delicate, yet powerful. The rhyme was not forced at all, great write!
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Thanks for the nice comment. I'm just glad it lived up to the inspiration of the original.
Jim
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Very nice Jim
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Thanks. Renee's poem was a good inspiration.
Jim
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Ah! Yes!
I am smiling over here, a wide grin!
Beautiful!
Always ♥
Renee
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Thanks again Renee
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