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Cherished Friend

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Early mornings knocks at my door

wake me they say you need me once

more.

Yesterdays are gone they fly by so

quickly they remind me of our times

together when our hearts ran free,

we were innocent of death… but

death takes and he has no mercy.

 

Seeing you die trying to hold on to a

life that gave you so much hell scared me,

I have never stared death in the face until

Your last breathes were taken from

me.

 

Was it fate that kept us separated?

Or just your unwillingness to forget

Your own past that brought you so

much pain and sorrow through out

your life.

 

You pursued me with such vengeances

and I didn’t take the hook maybe it was

God trying to protect me, who knows?

But I always wondered if I was apart of

that pain you held so tightly against your

heart.

 

Each time you called for me, I would go

and we would speak of things that made

our lives happier at least just for that

moment….

And then there were times when we would

share our grief’s our tears would mingled together

and you held me trying to make me feel safe and

complete.

 

I couldn’t be that fix you needed so desperately

it brought you much more pleasure than I ever did.

i made a promise to be there and i am glad i never

went back on it.

 

But to lose you…… all together brings me to

my knees and I weep deeply…… at the very thought

of death taking you from me.

 

 

You are my cherished friend forever….

 

 

Rend The Veil

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  • DolceVito gold member
    November 14
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    Bittersweet

    Excellent write...moving, touching.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      November 14
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      Vito

      Thank you for stopping by and taking the time to read my work!

      Bless you

      Ren

  • Ylova silver member
    November 11
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    So sad. But very beautiful. My eyes were tearing up as I read this.


  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 1
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    Dear Rend, reading again this painful write, makes me realize just how the thorn of a rose's passing(your dear friend) is still a wound in your heart..Someone that cannot be replaced...My heart is with you dear daughter...to replace the wound with healing, and another friend that God will give you that may not replace this friend, but be one that can take away the pain! Love Momxxooo


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      November 1
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      Thank you,

      for being here when i needed you the most,
      I love you mom,

      Rend

  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 5

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    This is incredibly beautiful! It actually had me in tears!! And I could relate to so much of this write, from both perspectives... though I haven't lost someone I loved like this in death, still a loss...

    Our pasts are sometimes so hard to forget and let go.. the part you spoke of that in the 4th staza really gripped my heart.. I try to work through mine, yet sometimes it's hard and causes me also to push people away.

    This really is such a touching write! Bravo!!


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 5

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      Thank you Jackie

      for your comment, when death hits you with that magnatude, you become a little fearful, it hits so close to home you get a reality check, actuaclly after that experience, it has left me pretty sad....

      thank you again,


      Rend

  • wildfiredreamer gold member
    October 1

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    wow, you knocked me down with this one. The emotion I felt when I read this, I couldn't even respond I just set here. This gives me a since of deep pain of losing someone long before we should.

    I might would have broke my lines a little different but that is what makes us unique as poets. You get what you want to say across to the reader very well.

    The one thing I can't tell is if this is a plea to someone to not play around with their life before they die, or to someone who did that. but either way it packs a punch.


    Rhonda


  • Daughter Grace silver member
    October 1

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    Beautiful

    Rend - You are a phenominal writer!!! This gave me chills and I felt the grace of this piece. Good God!


  • Paloszoo gold member
    October 1

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    Wow, this beautiful and tragic piece brought a lump to my throat. Written from the depths of your heart and soul....it was just phenomenal. Keep up the great work!

    • Rend the Veil gold member
      November 14
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      Thank you

      for taking the time and commenting on my poem!

      Bless you

      Rend

  • Ken-Maverick gold member
    October 1

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    This is truely amazing Rend
    This friend you speak of is very lucky indeed to have such a friend as yourself
    So much emotion in this thats i dont know where to begin

    Execellent Write

    Ken


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 1
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      thank you!

      Ken,

      i think you really understand what I feel,

      Blessings

      Rend

  • Dajuan
    October 1
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    A testament of the life of one's friendship


  • Ms. Black Eyeliner
    September 30
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    wow

    that was amazing so powerfull and amazing


  • Rose Angel gold member
    September 30

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    Empassioned write my dear Rend....I cannot begin to say just how much you have matured in writing since we first met..This is just so moving and wonderful..Bravo!

  • XXVampireeyesXX silver member
    September 30
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    aww so beautifully penned, thank you so much for sharing theres a lot to cope from here, Ive lsot ppl and it hurts to do so. At parts it reminded me of someone I hold dear, still living thank God, but unfortunately loving and cant tell him cuz hes a close friend and such... anyways this poem is really effective and beautiful, thank you for sharing hun!


  • wordsmith gold member
    September 30

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    This is very beautiful, Rend. Heartfelt and very emotional. I know exactly what you mean. You are a very good friend as I thought. We could all use a cheished friend such as you. Blessings!


  • In Too Deep1 gold member
    September 30
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    Oh my! This is such an emotional and heart touching writ. I am not even sure of how to comment .. what more can anyone say when so much has been felt? In agreement with Poppa, this is a tragic writ, but very beautifully penned. a most enjoyable read, and I thank you for sharing so deep and personal of a part of you.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      September 30
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      thank you

      very much for you comment,they are always appreciated!
      blessings

      Rend

  • poppa silver member
    September 30

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    Seems we all have our own crosses to bear, sometimes they can be too much... wonderful write, though I think very tragic too...
    big sssss

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