This place,
This place of hurt and misery,
This maze,
No way out,
No point of return,
Trapped inside,
With no way of escape.
It’s dark and cold,
Light forbidden to shine through,
Outside,
A ball of fire shot down and explodes,
And darkness overcomes the world outside,
Inside, darkness deepens,
And a dark shadow,
Slowly,
Secretly,
Sneaks upon me,
A lion hunting its prey in the tall grass,
Making its move.
Fear overcomes,
My legs start moving,
Slowly,
Then a little faster,
Then they run,
The shadow follows,
It starts off slow,
But then it gradually gains speed.
Can’t escape,
Branches come to life,
Wrapping around my ankles,
Slowly climbing up to my knees,
But I loosen their tight grip,
And once again,
With sweat running down my face,
Breath shortened,
My legs begin to run again.
This dark shadow,
Catching up to me,
Moves faster and faster,
Then,
A cave appears,
I hide there,
Thinking I am safe,
But then,
A flock of crows begin to stir,
Angered,
They move to attack,
As if to tear me apart,
Piece by piece,
I try to scare them off,
But nothing works,
I run out,
And the shadow is growing,
Larger,
And darker,
Light flashing from within,
Anger raging,
As if to seek revenge,
I continue to run,
But it still follows me.
Then,
A violent shake,
Everything seems to spin around,
Faster,
And then faster,
Then total darkness,
My eyes open,
Everything blurred,
It’s total darkness now,
The shadow is almost upon me,
I can feel its breath,
Harder and harder.
I arise,
And slowly,
Head still spinning,
I stagger through this darkness,
I begin to hear screams,
They get louder and louder,
Ahead,
Another cave,
A flame burning dimly from within,
Screams coming from within,
The shadow growing closer,
Nowhere else to go,
I walk in,
On the walls,
Writings,
Writings of others,
Those who have failed to survive,
And escape,
Stories of struggles,
Stories of love,
Hate,
And pain,
Peoples’ souls trapped within the stone.
Then,
In the corner,
Stands a tall mirror,
I look in,
And see a body,
A body worn,
In torn clothes,
A body of pain,
And a thump, thump,
Sounding from within,
And the mirror shows a heart,
A heart beating,
Slowly, tiredly as if giving up hope,
A heart bleeding,
Blood running out,
A mad river flowing uncontrollably.
The mirror shows a man standing beside me,
A man from my past,
A man I once loved,
But failed,
And on the wall,
Are the words,
My one and only,
My true,
Love.
Then,
A loud bang,
And looking in the mirror,
I see darkness,
The shadow of despair has caught me,
And pulling me into its grasp,
I scream,
And try to get away,
The mirror shatters into a million pieces,
Along with my body,
My heart,
My soul,
And my love,
I fall down a dark,
Deep hole,
And with one final grasp,
Total darkness,
And my story,
And soul,
Joins the rest,
Those who have failed to escape the shadow,
The shadow of despair,
The shadow of love,
The shadow of pain,
The shadow,
That won’t let my mind rest.
Emily
Author notes
Option 3--Emotions--agony, hurt, pain.
Wrote this after my boyfriend broke up after me. These are all my emotions that I had going through me. I was devastated. We had even talked about marriage and a future, but things change when one receives news of being deployed to Iraq and they don't want to be in a relationship. This helped me to somewhat get over him.
Option 4--The one with imagery
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well i can definitely feel the emotion in this piece--i know it's hard to cope with something like that-
the format was pretty interesting
good luck
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MEH
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this is great
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wow, i have been there too, as i was reading it i felt like i was trapped in a maze, trying to find the way out, but only finding more pain, and more things i didn't want, i loved what you wrote here, it's very powerful, best of luck in the contest
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Well, first I'll say that the meter is completely off. The reason being, some lines are choppy and short, and some lines are longer. It lacks any kind of artistic flow.
The emotions are very clear, and very well portrayed. This poem practically screams "agony".
Thanks for entering!
~Memoirs
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wowww
this is so good..I could feel the pain through the whole thing and could feel the pacing of the heart beat getting faster and faster....im really sorry about your bf...i wish you the best in life and hope things turn around for you....thanks for the entry and good luck in the contest....
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Well I can't relate to the Iraq part...but I know what it's like to think you're going to spend your future with someone only to have those plans ripped apart. This was amazing and you did a great job with the imagery...I couldn't focus on anything else 'till I got to the end to find out what happened. Great job on this and thanks for entering!!
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hummmm... interesting. Not real sure tho how it is written for my picture prompt. It is a interesting write tho and thanks for sharing it with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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