We were so young, so clever, sharp;
we thought that we could grasp
an apparition, beautiful and vague ... as Love.
By theory, verified and vast,
the group dynamics worked and values seemed enough:
we were Believers, intellectually smart,
absorbed in being civilized, by grace
were crowned. Our work was manifest and oft defined
as gratitude and our love for God.
But, unexpectedly, astute, so aptly masked
as Focus and as Purpose for our lives,
the Lie appeared in every minute task.
When fragments of our future died in flame,
there were some souls to blame, but rationale claimed:
It was the Lie that infiltrated Love.
But, no: it was our eyes that left
the face Above.
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Author notes
Prompt: Reify
In a list
A contest entry
- What's in a Word by micol.
300 points, ended October 8, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Dearest Myra,
I am very sorry to infrom you that someone calling himself Wilfred John has plagiarised this poem on at least two different websites. Here are the links to the websites where he has it posted as his own: http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/as-a-reason-for-our-lives-published/
http://wilfredjohn.blogspot.com/2008/10/as-reason-for-our-lives.html
He has plagiarised hundreds of poets all over the internet. I have been trying to figure out who he stole the poetry from and let them know. -
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I see he posted this poem on the date 2003 ...
with small alterations. The joke IS: this is a VERY personal poem, and my history is known by FransB on here ... That Wilfred John stole THIS poem, is very meaningful, for it is IMPOSSIBLE that any other person can have EXACTLY this same experiences.
I shall not hurt him for it. He may have all of my words.
I wrote this from a well of deep sorrow. Only God knows what the meaning is that WJ stole THIS poem! -
Thank you for telling me ...
I saw him hanging around on my poetry. Let him be. I wrote a poem today for your other contest about this same topic. If I can find his e-mail address, I shall post him a letter. Thank you for taking the time to follow this up. You are very special.
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Oh, by the way, you are not the only one at allpoetry that he has plagiarized. So far that I have found, he has also stolen poetry from Penman and Erigeneia.
Someone else that he stole from posted about it on her blog. I thought you might want to read it. Here is the link: http://outmavarin.blogspot.com/2008/10/laughing-spinning-changing-lies.html -
He has this email address posted on one site: wilfred_john99@yahoo.com
I contacted him about some lyrics to a Doors song he was claiming as his own, and he wrote back very graciously thanking me, saying that his niece was posting things from his diary online for him, and that she had accidently posted lyrics from his favorite song.
I almost believed him, but then I remembered that he had posted a plagiarized poem on my author page, before he was banned from the site, and even the comments he left on other people's poems are plagiarised.
He is still at it. I found things he posted on Blogspot just yesterday that are lyrics to songs by Dean J Baker.
You are a wonderful person, Myra, and I was angry about his blatant plagiarism before, but now that he has hurt someone I know and care about, I am furious!
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Wonderful
So very well expressed. A fantastic creation for the theme. Best of luck in the contest.
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The last line is the truth! I really, really, really enjoyed this piece! You did a fabulous job expressing your feelings in this piece! It was truly a joy to read. Yours in poetry,
gypsy
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Ah! Yes! The last line is the truth! The "Lie" cannot live without permission from the Truth.
For some,
"we thought that we could grasp
an apparition, beautiful and vague ... as Love."
"We thought that we could" ,we did, we do, we will...
Your second stanza is a familiar path for me, same road, different walk even if in the same size shoes.
I love the exposure of the "Lie". Wonderful! Can you imagine if we just followed the Laws and showed Love, one to the other, gave of our good-spirits...
This is a powerful labor of Love dear sister. Thank You! I wish you well in the challenge.
Much Love Always ♥
Renee
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Oh wow, I really, really, really enjoyed this piece, though it left me with a vague feeling of disquiet, as if my worldview had just put itself under a microscope and came up wanting, quite phenomenal!
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Your thoughts are
sometimes my thoughts. I am familiar with these concepts so aptly used in this poem, and even if we want to believe otherwise, healing and living is to identify the lie, remove it, cleanse the soul, replace it with the truth, practice and assess - this is what you have brought to us through this poem of life / truth. While this poem builds through its structure a 'crescendoed' flow, its 'truth' is hard and solid in the finale - an unexpected ending? Be forever blessed my friend, and in your humble life's walk, enjoy the fact that this is a true 'spotlighted' message to us all. Frans
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Passion held firmly in check by reason. Strong emotional undercurrents focused and formed by the structure of the poetic lines. You manipulate an essentially non-poetic vocabulary ("dynamics," "intellectually smart," "absorbed in being civilized") into serving the values and functions of poetry. A well handled piece. Thank you for entering the contest.
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Thank you for hosting ...
this very interesting contest.
I thoroughly enjoyed entering and think the poem was meant to be.
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okay I'm gonna have to go get a dictionary here.... exactly what is Reigy?
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v\Very detailed createing tjpuit on the monds of the rader. Pne can se the effort that you have put into this write. Very good.
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Sheer Brilliance!
I am in awe of this piece...it's perfect. It grabs at my very soul and is, without a doubt, one of the most amazing, profound poems i've ever had the pleasure to read. Thank you.
Annie
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This is brilliant!! You did a fabulous job expressing your feelings in this piece!! This is well portrayed excellent details and descriptions!! You truly did an amazing job!! I love the imagery!! Excellent word choice!! Your words flow like a river!! This is such an incredible write!! I love it!!
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Loved it!
Dit lees wrintiewaar pragtig ouvrou.
Goeie komposisie van woorde en ritme.
Behalwe miskien lyn 8.
Ek breek my kop en kan net dink die rede agter my vashaak op die lyn: ai-ai kan nie seg nie, maar kyk weer daarna, miskien kan die 2de "as" verdwyn?
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So true..the whole crux of the love lies in the matter of the look..our outlook towaards the love decides the destiny...you spoke quote deep here my friend..
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very insightful, blaming the purpose and over-stepping the true meaning of love, and then blaming God for it, rather than realizing that it is us who misuse and misrepresent love, and not acknowledging it was humanity and not God, that was behind the LIE of what true love really is. We have left God, we no longer look to him for guidance to true love.
Thats what I percieved of this wonderful pen you have written.
LOVED IT!!!
Bell, agape xx
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I am sending you 300 points for this poem and nominating it for spotlight as soon as I am done writing this comment. This is exceptional, moving, enlightening, revealing, honest, brutal, and perfect.
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Wow
Amazing poem. Great flow and a good mixture of solid feelings and cripticness. Btw I just got me green belt in karate tonight, didn't know it was possible to sweat that much =|.
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exellently written
Believe it/ or not, I know the feeling of which you speak.
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Very well written story all too familiar...sad as it be. A perfect entry to the contest...a winner in my book.
Be well,
Shelly
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It is a tragedy when ideals are corrupted, and it seems to happen so often. They call it selling out, or giving in to forces; it may be as you say, putting our eyes in the wrong place. Your poem does not use strong words for this process, but has a strong and sad effect. Best of luck!
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