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Freedom

The waves beat the sand
As each beat of my heart
Echoes the freedom of the surf.
The open sea,
Slave to no man,
Pushes her limbs
Where she sees fit –
Toppling children and sandcastles,
Diverting the swimmers
Wherever she wants,
While I woefully watch,
Slave to my body,
Longing to lose myself
To the sand and the surf
And to be master no more.
For what is it to be master of a prison,
When I could be a plaything of Nature?

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  • Angelflower Greeters member
    October 4

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    Welcome To Allpoetry

    Hello dmusicat,



    I must say this was really well done. I love how it flows so well together.. The imagery was just so vivid and the story line was amazing.. I love how there was so much emotion as well.. You did such a wonderful job, I'm sure that many here on Allpoetry will love this as much as me.. Thank you very much for sharing this with us here.. I hope to read much more from you in the near future..

    Jetleena

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    • dmusicat
      October 4
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      Thanks!

      Thanks Angelflower! I really appreciate your comment! I was really upset that day - stuck on a beautiful beach, but couldn't swim - with a situation like that, the only thing a poet can do is write, right? Thanks again! ^_^