this is cashmere
soft out of poetry
too smooth to digest
true enough to wear
- bulletproof
needles pierce like necropolis
puppy squeals -
proof pain can be adorable
though the fog
breaks disjunct like
a queer puzzle
purposely left unsolved
- it's better that way
the holy water below
yellows
dog-eared pages
read insincere
hell indents a little deeper
more room for us
god is poker-faced
like Hollywood stars
magnetized in black and white gloss
and Sharpie moustaches
we reject the spotlight
for the flames
- it's better right here
neon fiction ablaze
better than he was
last Sunday
Author notes
Dedicated to: James, aka apples fell
notoire==>notorious
(I'm providing the French definition for myself as I know dick about the French language. So no, I'm not patronizing you. 
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My god, you'd think it was a dedication poem to myself ...
it's really not. 
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Sharpie moustaches are the best kind ... as you'd know.
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Better not.
In a list
When I discovered gravity ...
Comments
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"hell indents a little deeper
more room for us"
Damn you. I hate the mention of words like 'god' and 'hell' in a poem - makes me biased really, as i remember quite vividly an attack I had from the godsquad on this site.
But it's amazing how you can put it in,
and forget hating it, i love it.
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The godsquad?
Who are they? They'd probably burn me to a crisp...
Thanks so much.
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lol, just search users
and type in: Jesus
all of them make up the godsquad, lol
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and you gave *me* this prompt to write about?!
fail on my part! This is perfection! Well ... maybe not quite (I have to remember not to flatter you ) but if there is anything wrong with it then I have no idea what it is 
... I loved (times three) the 'dog-eared pages' part - it struck a nerve 
I can't really pull out other pieces I liked without pasting the whole poem here so I think I'll leave it as 'holy fuck you rock!'
Keep writing
Polly
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I love your comments
more than you can know.
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This is pretty sweet. I don't know if it's because I'm also listening to The Beginning is the End is the Beginning by Smashing Pumpkins, but this is extremely soothing and disturbing at the same time.
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Thank you!!!
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Now this is the goods.
Definitely a favorite
of which my favorite
part is...
"god is poker-faced
like Hollywood stars
magnetized in black and white gloss
and Sharpie moustaches
we reject the spotlight
for the flames
- it's better right here"
ACDC said it best
Hell ain't no bad place to be.
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Thanks!!! :)
Meet you in hell then?
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This made me think which I love.
The way you write is very unique which is one of my favorite things to discover [the different way people write] and I also got lots of imagery which is another one of my favorite things
<3
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This is fantastic.
i'm so jealous, haha, you've got such skill at your age, it's amazing. your use of metaphor and description paints this picture perfectly for me... but it's not in images like a lot of poetry is... i get visuals, if that makes any sense at all. it's really cool, not a lot of poets can accomplish that with me. so it's a real credit to you and your work that you do that. awesome, awesome job!
♣ Tegan
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That means a lot...thanks.
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no problem, it's true!
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I really liked your use of imagery
and the sense of emotions behind how your words seem to be spoken.
Excellent write.
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You hardly ever read me!
Thanks for reading.!
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you're right
how shameful of me *hangs head low*
i should read more -
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LMAO that's not necessary
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maybe not
but i will
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Wicked write! And you made room in hell for us So sweet! Love the line 'god is poker-faced' wonder what that really looks like...? Awesome work hunni
I'm sure he will love it!
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Thanks!
He won't be on for a while. :/
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long absences grow sharpie moustaches
in places and paces below holy
watered, bellied and dog eared
scraps of sound and figment of words
from within the necropolis of contentment
like a hell hound howl on a night rain
in autumn
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LMAO--my constant response to you
"necropolis of contentment" That's soooo good and contradictory, kind of.
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you know
every bedroom is a necropolis
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Oh god. You're probably right.
That's scary and insightful.
You villain, you...
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Done anything diabolical lately?
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hmmm
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How about embroidery?
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I leave that to the spiders...
I don't grow them for nothing ya know? -
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LMAO!
Is one of them named Charlotte?
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huh?
how'd you know that?
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LMFAO, Dizzy?
Explainage.
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yeah he sews the air
over and over again
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LMAO!! Only him?
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yeah
he's been the only one honest to wear an eye patch
the others pretend they know what they're doing...
in the begining there was only one you see... Charlotte: a sweet and young princess I kidnapped (at her request) and together we were waiting for a young knight in a shining armor and riding a white horse to come slay me and save her... BUT only freaks driving cars showed up and, in time, she became old, bitchy and bitter; so I turned her into a spider along with her pretenders...
the repeated the scenario with other princesses and knights but no one ever fucking rode a damn horse white or not... except Dizzy but he was riding a green one...
so... you know... these are the procedures and must be respected... now they're all spiders -
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LMFAO
What a story.
Pulled it out of your ass?
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I can't say the same thing for myself...
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I was about to bet on that...
maybe you should eat some soap -
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My life is already a dramatic soapbox.
Don't need to eat soap.
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James will just squeal with delight when he reads this as will Alex and he'll demand equal rights you know!!!
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But squealing is so undignified...
Which fits him completely.
LMAO.
Thanks.!!!
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This is bloody awesome!!!!! *is jealous of your writing style* <=== truely!!!!!
He's gotta love this!!!
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Liar liar pants on fire :P
He won't be online for a while, but yeah, he better.
Thanks
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No lying here!! I think you are amazing !! And I wanna write like that
<== meh, the two year old again
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To each er...her own. I like your style.
<=='tis fun, 'tis fun
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The first verse lets me know that this is a warm poem.
Cashmere is warm isn't it? I have never owned any.But what a way to go.
Line 11 was not aware that we could use the word queer, anymore. I was describing something as queer(strange) the other day, and got chewed out for it.
Sharpie moustaches- outstanding. for those unable to grow one, this is far better.
Can't wait for next Sunday,cause he get's better each week.
Great dedcation poem.
Joe
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A detailed comment?
As for the word 'queer', haven't you watched "Queer Eye for the Straight Guy"? Actually...I've never watched the show, but to hell...I can use 'queer' whenever I want, PC or not.
LoL.
As for the Sharpie moustaches, that was from a comment J made a long time ago about how he wanted to draw Sharpie moustaches on old celebrity pictures [after reading a poem of mine].
I love Sundays.
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so fucking great.
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You are, you are.
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Girl, you need to get this stuff published, I'm serious now, because talent like this must be shared with the world in print.
You are amazing, brilliant, simply brilliant!
With much admiration and love,
mj.
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Do you always make comments like this? I have to ask because that's insanely flattering...I'm glad you think so since it's a dedication poem for one of my favorite people on AP.
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No, he doesn't always make comments like that trust me! You are brilliant hun!!!
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