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Jamming

Hear them play any day have to say they're the way
Weeeeee
  wanna hear every note that they play
Ooooover
  and over again
going higher
and higher
and higher
it chases
and dashes
and dives

Get the beat in your seat tap your feet so complete

Thhhhheeeeeeeeen
Listen
he wavers
and trembles
beseeches
and reaches
converting and hurting
and rumbling and tumbling
above us below us all round
and within

Feel the drum in your bum tap your thumb peace will come

Then again
and agaaaaaaaiiiiiiiiiinnnnnn
down it
comes
crashing
and dashing
applauding
rewarding
ignoring
imploring
losing
and
musing
for aaaaaaaaallllllllllllllllllllllllllll

Keep is low play it slow gotta know whats on show
Keep it cool we can rule play the fool leaving school
Now it gets fast go for a blast the past is the past nothing will last

And stilllllllll
high above
and below
in and
out
up and down
round
and around
and arouuuuuund
and arooooooound
we can pppppppppppllllllllllaaaaaaaayyyyyyyyy

The thump the bump of chump on chump
Just pump and dump the clump of rump

As the chairs
start to move
and to stick
in the groove
Gotta try
To improve
before you
can just break away and fllllyyyyyyyyyyyy
thought the skkkkkkkkkkkyyyyyyyy
Catch the eeeeyyyyyyyyyeeeeee

Kitty cat puppy dog baby calf tiny lamb

All over the world
there are sounds
we can find
and can use
or refuse
and subvert
or convert

Now it ends, no more friends as it tends it suspends

TO GET IT WWWWWWWWWWWWWWWIIIIIIIIIILLLLLLLLLDDDDDDDDD

Author notes

HHHHHmmmmmmmmm

I have no idea if this works for you or anyone else
Does for me, sort of.

Please tell me what you think

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Comments


  • deercatcher
    October 12

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    If you have a piece that particularly inspires, link it as part of the presentation. I got a Steve Tyler Aerosmith kind of vibe off this. It might be a challenge to read to my writers group...

  • PassionsPromise gold member
    October 5

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    Okay. HHHMmmmm is all I can say

    Not like you at all, but if it works for you and the unique one let it be said.

    Good luck to you in the contest


    Love
    Passions


    • cricketjeff gold member
      October 5
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      I don't know that it does work for me
      I know exactly what I am trying to write
      but I don't think anyone else will hear what I hear reading this.
      I am trying to express what the music does for me, there is an underlying regularity, that changes and adapts through the piece, these are the metrical internally rhymed lines, the solos, all different all related (in my mind) are the free verse in between.

      It was a try, I leave it to others to tell me how far short I fell.

      • PassionsPromise gold member
        October 5
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        No trying to impress your FVerser. Dont. Be you. Your mind is unique and when yourself is plainly understood. The rhyming was perfect(as always) but I was thrown by the free verse, then again could just be me. (wich it probably is) but it isnt you. s I would never say you *fell* for, you tried others just may not get it. I tried

        but hey its in unique ones contest, therefore, she'll tell us both how it goes and maybe we will have a better understanding whats going on in your head when "JAMMING"