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Reflection

To see her beauty in the dark flowing,

haunted by the cold in the glass mirror back,

emerge recognition, hovered somewhat sadden

all knowing ravens reveal vanity view

conflicted, she could not foresee lost love

in the glass stands between a summer gone,

and the coldness radiance of fall.

Author notes

Kendhal22
Prompt #1
for the darker poets

PhotoCredit: Dark Reflection by `larafairie

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  • ElectricBloom
    November 23
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    I'm not normally a fan of darker writes,
    but I do like this.
    Great use of poetic devices, I love the alliteration. Morbid yet beautiful imagery throughout.
    I love the lines :

    conflicted, she could not foresee lost love
    in the glass stands between a summer gone,

    thank you,
    I truly enjoyed reading this!

    ElectricBloom

  • Cherry Moon
    November 7

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    This is a dark and forlorn write, yet the imagery you create through your words is clear and powerful. It has a smooth flow to it, and a lasting effect on readers. A very interesting write well done, and thanks for entering the contest!

    Chin up,
    Summer Moon xx

  • leander gold member
    November 2

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    I really like the alliteration you have used within the lines of this poem. That is a nice touch of detail - especially because you've managed to capture quite some beautiful images as well...

    Thank you for entering the contest!
    Leander
  • trekkergirl silver member
    October 27

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    thanks for sharing this write with us. And thanks for entering it into my contest. You wrote this well. Congrats on the HM.

    • kendhal22 gold member
      October 27
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      Thank you

      Thank you for the wonderful comment given to my poem. Kendhal22

  • Erica Carnea
    October 15
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    good poetry
    x.x.x


  • BlackBloodyRose
    October 7

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    um....i like this, but the wording is harsh , i am not one to have to use a dictionary to read a poem. still very imaginative nd beautiful
    • kendhal22 gold member
      October 7
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      Thank you

      Sometimes being a dark writer you peel away the layers that are too grosse to see. Bringing the imagery darker made her volunerable.
      I wanted the images to portray she had hidden layers, but could not express them at the mirror. The mystery is in the glass standing to open. Thank you for the wonderful comments given to my poem. Kendhal22

  • princess Jewelcat22
    October 7

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    This is unique and so well written!!I love reading different pieces!! You truly did a very lovely job portraying this write!! You gave very excellent details and descriptions!! This is beautiful!! I love it!!
    • kendhal22 gold member
      October 7
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      Thank you

      Thank you for the wonderful comment given to my short piece. I'm glad you liked it. Kendhal22

  • hopelesspoet
    October 6

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    This is a very interesting write very well written it makes the imagination run wild and it can make up it's own setting in just a few lines. You did good keep up the good writing i look forward to reading more. Blessed be.

    . Rewarded 4


  • kishi-tenshi
    October 6
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    I couldn't stop myself on memorizing the lines you have here... meaning I enjoyed it very much...

    • kendhal22 gold member
      October 7
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      Thank you

      I'm glad you had a lasting impression then I know I've done well as a dark writer. Thank you for stopping by and given such a warm sentiment to my poem. Kendhal22

  • lisapoet gold member
    October 6

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    Very deep and dark. I also wrote a poem penned, "Reflection" I had to re-name it. You write well in the third person. I liked your old feel imagry. Reminds me of Poe. Nice
    • kendhal22 gold member
      October 7
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      Thank you

      Thank you for the wonderful sentiments given. Thank you for thinking of this short piece in the same manner as Poe. Kendhal22

  • DirtyLittlePrincess
    October 6
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    I thought this poem was breathtakingly beautiul
    • kendhal22 gold member
      October 6
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      Thank you

      I start to make this into a sonnet, but forgot this was only a fifty word contest. Maybe I will finish it soon, and bring the dark beauty to light. Thank you for the wonderful comments given. Kendhal22
    • kendhal22 gold member
      October 6
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      Thank you

      Thank you for the wonderful comments given to my poem. I was suprise to recieve comments given. Kendhal22

  • Terry Collett
    October 6
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    Good poem.

    good poem well composed.

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