I fell today
But it didn't hurt...
It left no marks,
I didn't bleed.
I cut myself today
But I didn't feel it...
It didn't leave a scar
It didn't even bleed.
I'm just so tired
Of not feeling anything
I've become so numb
I'd rather feel pain
I just want to feel!
I want proof I'm alive
I want to live
I want to feel.
I finally feel something
Since I found you
I feel alive now...
I am no longer numb
You opened my eyes
And helped me feel
I built a wall
around my heart
But you came along
And tore it down.
I just wanted to feel
Just something...
I'd become so numb
I would have rather felt pain.
Author notes
something I wrote a little while ago... yeah, I don't remember when I wrote it, though... anyways, what'd you think?
Please Tell Me What You Think
Comments
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There are some great ideas in this poem, partially the second last stanza.
"You opened my eyes
And helped me feel,
I build a wall
around my heart,
But you came along
and tore it down".
That is my fav part, a new lover to bring back feelings lost. It could do with some more emotion thrown in, but overall a fine write. -
The sixth stanza describes a wonderful feeling of how friendship or intimacy can light up a life
(but the last stanza is a little bit confusing)> -
It sounds like you found someone special. I think it kicks ass. Great job.
Mike
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