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A walk into my heart, my life...

You were clothed for the grand evening,
w a l k i n g…
                              in the right direction
                              at the right time
                              into my heart
                              into my life
w a l k i n g…
                              right now
                              to meet and greet…

w a l k i n g...

                              coolly towards my nervous heartbeat.

Sitting,
FACE to ECAF

sipping coffee at Starbucks,
longing for the moment
when I’d be in your embrace.
I gaze at your angelic face,
the devil in me ogling beneath your clothes,
with different fleeting moments
of love and lust…

I know it’s all there for me…
                                    to explore your body and your soul…

When coffee cups have ended up in the bins,
we take a walk, along the shore’s sands,
                    l o n g g gggggggggggggggggggggggg
                                                        like my yearning
to know what lies beneath your beautiful smile,
as we come closer to kiss for the first time.

Kissing deep,
tongues delved and turned
like a spoon in a child’s hand,
trying to scoop the last molecule of ice cream from the bowl.

Feelings of lust have disappeared
and all that remains now is your love
coming from your
                                            gentlest,                    kindest
                                       purest, honest,          caring, loving
                                   enchanting, beautiful, free, open, bold
                                  captivating, cHarming, sincere, genuine
                                    modest, peacEful, soft, humble, calm
                                         true, mArvelous, great, amazing,
                                            full, undeRstanding, simple,
                                                respecTful, concerned,
                                                     compassionate
                                                       unchanging
                                                             big
that is changing my life for the better…

Author notes

lencio-sunchild

To the one that is changing my life for the better, and you know who you are. A bit of option 4


Special thanks to Bebo El Garhe

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Comments

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  • afroqban
    November 1

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    this poem excited me! amazing! u got to show me the heart thing, that is bad ass! u rock, gold all the way. hell im in the contest, and i even vote you! well done


    • lencio-sunchild gold member
      November 2
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      Hey thanks, Im flattered! really, I am glad you like the heart thing. Let me see what you have done...

      Love and light,
      Lencio

  • toomysterious
    November 1
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    Very interesting, unique and deep. Very creative.

  • mcw120588
    October 31
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    this is excellent. i dont know if the wording and images or the honesty or the use of visuals are the most amazing part of this poem. writing face backwards was cool as was that heart with the word heart in there. out of curiosity is that your own creation? regardless this entire poem is something more than i expected! thank you

    • lencio-sunchild gold member
      November 1
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      LOL! yeah all what you see in here in my very own creativity. I am glad you liked it. Thanks!

  • xBeCx
    October 19
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    I'm kind of speechless...I really enjoyed reading this poem. It's so unique and different to usual poetry that it actually took me a couple of reads to get it.

    You said it's a bit of option 4....do you mind expanding on that?

    Keep up the good work, well done, thank you and good luck in my contest.

    Rebecca

    X

  • sewasham gold member
    October 9

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    A very unique write Lencio. I liked the contrasting forms you used to help define your words and thoughts. Nicely done. Take care and Have fun. Steve

  • bebo el garhe
    October 8
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    wonderful

    Dear lencio,
    it s really greaaaaaaaaaaaaat work coming from your soft herat

    this red heart is amazing really very imaginative

    but i don't think this big heart comes from nothing he must have seen in u deep on u all off this ad more.
    all the best with the contest but remember that u r no.1

     

     


  • poppa silver member
    October 8
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    Wonderful write, though to me I think the layout distracts from the beauty and love evident within your words... they are strong enough without being prettied, but that is just my personal preference..
    great write, and hope that one day I can find someone who makes me feel as you do
    Cheers
    poppa.

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    • lencio-sunchild gold member
      October 8
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      I guess it could be distracting if one is not used to this layout. Just wanted to make it seem different and special. Thank you, I do appreciate it and respect your opinion.

      Lencio

  • ValleyOfEchoes gold member
    October 6

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    beautifully penned

    when one finds happiness, its hard not to express
    and acknowledge it to all, this form is beautifuu=lly writte, thank you for sharing and good luck with all that counts to you!!
    Linda

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  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    October 6
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    Hi Lencio
    looks like someone has lost there heart again your a hopeless romantic what can I say its the only way to fly.. I like the way you set out the poem, abstract and the words all worked well looks as if the Master has his MoJo back Yeah Baby....
    Cyber Artist
    Paul


  • moon2u silver member
    October 6

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    nice to meet you Lencio
    I love the red word heart you created
    very imaginative
    and I think someone has captured Your heart
    good luck in the contest
    moon2u

    . Rewarded 4


  • janejainejayne gold member
    October 6
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    Bravo!

    DearLSC
    I love Lencio when he is in love!!!
    For then we get to see his own beautiful heart!
    This is you at your best!
    All of it is lovely but the big beautiful
    heart at the end sounds like yours?
    She must be a wonderful girl!
    I loved every word!
    Jane


    • lencio-sunchild gold member
      October 6
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      Thanks!

      Lol! yeah it is my heart! my sweetheart! Thanks for this very uplifting comment Jane.

      Lencio

  • X-Queen-Georgia-X
    October 6

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    THIS IS AMAZING! I love the layout you will have to show me how to make poems look so pretty Great work and good luck in the contest xxxxx


    • lencio-sunchild gold member
      October 6
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      Thanks Georgia! Just be yourself, and write whatever you feel like, put on your creative gear and you will get poems like this. I think very soon I will stop writing in rhyme and write more or less like this and people will call me insane! but I will continue to write what I feel. thanks for your comment and do knock if you may want some ideas sometimes. Would be more than willing to help!

      Lencio

  • KyleBerg gold member
    October 6
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    This is brilliant!!!
    The heart is so well done, it looks beautiful and you chose wonderful words to fill it with. i agree with Ambrea -- the FACE to ECAF is great! This poem is really creative and.. just awesome. I can't quite put it into words, but i really love this! thank you for recommending it!!
    truly well done.


    • lencio-sunchild gold member
      October 6
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      I am glad you liked it, you yourself are an amazing writer and I quite like your style. Love the "im a big boy now" great poem!

  • Ambrea
    October 6
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    NO STOP!!...now THIS....my friend, is an interesting way to make a common theme original!! Thank you so MUCH for making it interesting and fun to read I LOVE the FACE to ECAF...that made me laugh! Beautiful write!! VERY original! A loving and life changing story with exaggerated punctuation and imagery. AWESOME! Thank you so much for entering and good luck in the contest!!

    • lencio-sunchild gold member
      October 6
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      Thanks!

      I am glad you liked this, was a littel unsure as to how you'd feel about this whole thing. Thanks!
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