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Butterfly Love

Butterfly touch -
hands
tracing,
butterflies
fluttering
within
the
tummy.

Butterfly kisses -
winged
whispers;
brushing
lips
release
air
tremors.

Butterfly storm -
feverish
rain
flushing
bodies
with
butterfly
love.

Author notes

Author Name: Maktub
Link: http://borychan.deviantart.com/art/Falling-away-with-you-67460912

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Comments

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  • Rejected Easter Egg silver member
    October 16
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    you stole my gold

    • maktub
      October 17
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      Sorry you feel that way...but it does make me think...if is yours, then I wouldn't have it, would I? ☺

      I think I will just have to read your poem, I guess...
      Smile♫

  • Her Hero
    October 7

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    As many others already said, beautiful and in my opinion, very inspiring. Couldn't have done any better...If I could even do this well. xD


  • januaryrain
    October 6
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    Lovely, so soft and gentle, like the butterfly.
    Well done.


  • Terry Collett
    October 6
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    Good poem.

    Good delicately composed poem.

  • koganei55
    October 6
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    Oops. Here you go!


  • koganei55
    October 6

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    Very emotional and descriptive. Beautiful, beautiful butterflies. The poem flows very well and is very vivid

  • salia noora
    October 6
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    beautifully simple yet descriptive and moving...xx

  • cindy4
    October 6
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    Very good write


  • Natural Disaster
    October 6
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    Forgot


  • Natural Disaster
    October 6
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    Unique! I like it, the spacing!gave it a wicked rhythm.
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