I hear the thoughts
Of silence thinking,
I smell the eyes
Of a perfume watching,
Haunting the ghost of my own
Whose whisper laughs in breaths,
Breathing a splendid sadness
So chilling,
Down the neck of a field of a frozen Flowers
Who hath chosen to play, alone
In my own own winters heart
The taste's so
Familiar,
Bitter,
So wonderfully cold
Makes love to the story of yesterdays song,
Lost to the lust,
Of the memory,
Of the dear raven and swan
The flame of revenge, tis said
Can often,
warm even the coldest of hearts,
Burning holes,
Beneath the dark
Even now as I sit watching,
waiting, romancing the shadows
In my tower above the crashing sea
Awaiting fates hands,
To finish the tale,
Penned from ink, then Inked into foul,
Ravished Upon the face of a clock
A dawning tide,
To where the heavenly stars helplesly reside
Draped in a violent,
Violet blue
So sombrely stopped
of a thirteenth and final hour
I hear the thoughts of the world
like a dream, fading, falling
As my soul wakes to that sea.
A contest entry
- Trick or Treat by Florida Sunshine.
650 points, ended November 6, 16 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How did you see the story in your minds eye?
Comments
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same
had to read this twice -
great read
loved the imagery keep rocking on -
i really like your usage of words and your sentences seem so brilliantly crafted. i also liked the image i received while reading the words "Tower above the sea"
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Excellent write
This piece held me the whole way thorugh you have such a way with words and so perfectly placed I say Bravo my friend thankyou for asking me to read your work I shall put you on my favorites and keep in touch
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Again with the dark thingy.....I know you like it but it still..... whatever. Anyways, I really like the meaphors and poetic devices used in this- my favorite phrase is "I hear the thoughts
Of silence thinking"
Keep up the good work.
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You are genius with words, my friend.
It always amazes me when someone can write this detailed and so DEEP! I love it.
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again
shivers my friend shivers
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i agee with the your first comenter she is right when she tell that your poems are more story based and mor indepth .. this is a good thing and i loke this peace as well .. keep wrighting
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I like the style you used to write this ~ I think when written in this manner it gives a better impact to the overall delivery of the write. ~
I love the imagery and metaphors you penned within the write ~ Thanks so much for entering the contest ~ it was a welcome pleasure to read your work. I'm sorry it took me so long to judge ~ hopefully I'll be finished soon.
Florida Sunshine
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Thank you so much, i'm glad you like it, i look forward to entering more of my future writes.
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its seems to me that your poems tell stories most of everyone elses are just trying to make a point across
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