With great heroism we can face many trials
Becoming instruments to bond fragile lives
With no heartfelt feeling efforts are not worthwhile
Chords of harmony crumble if merely contrived.
Becoming instruments to bond fragile lives
Passionate efforts will flow through mankind's veins
Chords of harmony crumble if merely contrived
Songs of fervent faith are sung in balanced refrain.
Passionate efforts will flow through mankind's veins
Firm foundations of friendship thrive with sentiments sincere
Songs of fervent faith are sung in balanced refrain
Such greatness leads us all to new frontiers.
Firm foundations of friendship thrive with sentiments sincere
With no heartfelt feelings efforts are now worthwhile
Such greatness leads us all to new frontiers
With great heroism we can face many trials.
Author notes
"Courage. I know now that man is capable of great deeds. But if he isn't capable of great emotion, well, he leaves me cold."--Albert Camus, The Plague
Pantoum
The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines
of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain; each quatrain introduces a
new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing
quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA.
The design is simple:
Line 1
Line 2
Line 3
Line 4
Line 5 (repeat of line 2)
Line 6
Line 7 (repeat of line 4)
Line 8
Continue with as many stanzas as you wish, but the ending stanzathen repeats the second and
fourth lines of the previous stanza (as its first and third lines), and also repeats the third line of
the first stanza, as its second line, and the first line of the first stanza as its fourth. So the first
line of the poem is also the last.
Last stanza:
Line 2 of previous stanza
Line 3 of first stanza
Line 4 of previous stanza
Line 1 of first stanza
In a list
A contest entry
- Quotes--love, war, racism, politics, and so much more. by Kelsey-Jo.
1100 points, ended October 20, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please Tell Me What You Think
Comments
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The design is simple? I think not; it looked as complicated and confusing as heck; but you made a great job of it
Especially loved taht first verse, thought it was very powerful, and impacting! Best wishes for the contest
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Wonderful
Very creative use of the from. And so very well written. A terrific expression. Best of luck in the contest.
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Interesting form to choose for this quote. I think I've come to enjoy the sort of circular motion experienced in reading it and coming back to the original line. It does indeed fit the idea--highlights the fact that allowing oneself to experience great emotion is actually the most heroic act possible.
"Chords of harmony crumble if merely contrived."-- Love that line. So many implications!
Thank you kindly for taking the time to enter!
Kelsey-J -
very interesting. I like the way this one is written. And thanks for explaining it. Not sure tho if I could write like that tho.
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