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Tangled

Plagued by the internal argument;
Where does it stop?
When will it all become clear?
I try, I fight, I do all I can,
Yet here I lay; immobilised,
Pain pulsating, crippling.
The ribbons that are my life;
tangle tighter within the knot,
the loose strands become lost,
re-tangled; hiding the ends.
More ribbons added,
the complexity of the knot deepens,
once again closing around the ghost,
of a whispered memory,
where once more I shall hide;
within the twisted tangles of my life.

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  • leander gold member
    October 27

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    The alliteration you have used here and there really is a very nice touch of detail. There's also quite some imagery within these lines and that's something I definitely appreciate in poetry.

    Thank you for entering the contest!
    Leander

  • Super-man
    October 12
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    Stunning

    I really hope someone fixes your pain one day.
    Awesome bit of writing.

  • SuicidolteenS
    October 8

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    This is beautifully dark. The more I read it more I can relate to it.


  • WolfHeart gold member
    October 7

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    How angst filled and touching. I know just what you are going through - and sometimes I want to go into that dark night, but then the next day comes. Bless your heart. I too am here for you...anytime.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    October 7

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    I am always here for you and it time things will be better you are loved hang in there you are never ever alone I repeat myself alot love you loads


  • Rose Dark Thorn gold member
    October 7

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    I wish I could assure you that everything would be alright, hon', but I can't. I can only offer you encouragement and support, and all my love and best wishes.

    Love you, sweetie.

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