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Matrix *

"Not only our future economic soundness but the very soundness of our democratic institutions depends on the determination of our government to give employment to idle men.**"

Franklin D. Roosevelt, 32nd President of the United States




Illusory
Boundaries
Surround
My Reality

Tide
Pulsing
Through
My
Brain

Where
Will
I
Go
On

This
Freight
Train? **

Author notes

Written at the Hurricane Cafe, 10/05/2008



* http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Matrix

** http://www.brainyquote.com/quotes/authors/f/franklin_d_roosevelt.html

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**http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Great_Depression

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  • condor gold member
    October 25

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    This little piece was very well written leaving it open for interpretations. It sounded as though you were on this train just heading for wherever it took you, life around you passing as though it did not know you were there, and you somewhat disallusioned by its blindness. I like poems that can be interpreted in many ways. I loved the short sharp lines, the bite it gave, and the open question at the end. Extremely well done and deserving of a great applause which i give you.

    • Striders Bar - silver member
      October 26
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      Thank you for your very thoughtful comments; compliments, and applause.
      I do appreciate them.

  • Woodchuck4400 silver member
    October 9

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    Great job. I enjoyed this one. The imagery of a tide pulsing through the brain and a freight train were well done.

    Mike

    • Striders Bar - silver member
      October 26
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      Thank you for your compliments; comments and applause. I do appreciate them.
      I'm pleased that you enjoyed this.

  • Fear of Sleep
    October 8
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    so many different interpretations-....mind...-exploding.

    X|

    lol

    • Striders Bar - silver member
      October 8
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      Thanks for the great compliment; and applause, my friend. I do appreciate them.

  • Death by Murder
    October 7

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    Holy crap. That was amazing. I don't even know what to say, that was so amazing. It was really straightforward and to the point and not very lengthy but it was just... wow.

    I love it. I love how you used only one word per line, it gives it a very choppy feeling which definitely works with what you're trying to convey. This was just great. Very nice work. I loved reading it.

  • Confusedboy gold member
    October 7
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    hahahaha, a delight to read, as many of us are 0n the train ride of our lives.

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