Here are destines on hold, handkerchiefs warm from tears,
and with the wind relives what has been helpless.
A coal glows as an ember eye, to stalk nights of fears
here are destines on hold, handkerchiefs warm from tears.
A voice resigned through all the crawl of desperate years
sorely points of duress seen coldly, a most casual distress.
Here are destines on hold, handkerchiefs warm from tears,
and with the wind relives what has been helpless.
It is the undulating memory of the most pure
to parody the Sun and associate with the moon;
so much in life as in love we must endure
It is the undulating memory of the most pure
to doubt the place we hold, delicious and unsure
rites of mind so unkindly stay, sway and swoon
It is the undulating memory of the most pure
To parody the Sun and associate with the moon
look at this map the living poem
It is a cold that comes from inside.
it is the man who cannot find home
look at this map the living poem
whistled in the night as destiny roams
life often leaves little to decide
look at this map the living poem
It is a cold that comes from inside.
Author notes
Judge's entry-
Great Old Poet Collaborator: Jorge Mateus De Lima
Cento Notes:
To parody the Sun and associate with the moon
http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/121840-Jorge-Mateus-de-Lima-The-Lamplighter
It is the undulating memory of the most pure
http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/121842-Jorge-Mateus-de-Lima-This-Love-Poem-Is-Not-A-Lament
there are destines on hold, handkerchiefs warm from tears,
http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/122082-Jorge-Mateus-de-Lima-The-People-Of-Mira-Celi-----Family-Album-
And with the wind relives what has been helpless
http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/show/122696-Jorge-Mateus-de-Lima-Untitled-
look at this map the living poem
http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/121786-Jorge-Mateus-de-Lima-Through-the-Silence
It is a cold that comes from inside.
http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/show/122638-Jorge-Mateus-de-Lima-Happiness
A contest entry
- Collab with a Great Poet … part two by Peteskid.
1600 points, ended October 19, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thank you for introducing me to another poet. A line such as "to parody the Sun and associate with the moon" compels me to read the rest of that poem. I have never been a fan of the triolet form because it seemed so close and confining, but you and the other poets in this contest have expanded its boundaries and created beautiful poetry. This contest has the three things I love best about AllPoetry: classic verse, talented writers and a lively exchange of commentary and ideas. You have energized the whole experience for me. Liz
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I like the others admire the breaks that offer
us pause while we absorb...and there's much to
take-in. This poet is one I'm not familiar with,
but seems to have an ability to haunt with words.
You've paired that ability well. Blue
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Ah, I see you liked my way of breaking the format. It worked well here. I enjoy playing around with formats and enjoyed to see you like it too
GREAT choice of poet!!!
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'To parody the Sun and associate with the moon'
I love that line!
You chose a great poet and a difficult one to borrow lines from. Yet, the result turned to be very good. Ah, and the lines breaking differently than the 'traditional' format, I like that, gives us more freedom to arrange the pauses.
You did it well, and comments like the one before mine come from people who don't know what they are talking about
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S.M.F.
No offense but, it seems like you just threw a bunch of words together...It doesn't really make sense...at all.
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Thank you for taking time to read and leave a comment, which i do not find in anyway negative...if intended that way sorry, you will have to do more... i take every comment for a good intention to help the writer grow... and here i assure ... I will ... again my thanks for your time and efforts...PK
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