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Running Around Like A Chicken With Its Head Cut Off


Break a fever and sweat it out,
you run a mile when I'll just walk it.
I told you how it was going to be,
why wouldn't you just believe me?

Taking me at my word,
why is that so hard for you to achieve?
You break backs like feeble sticks
and act like everything's okay.

What if I told you
that payback's on its way?

 

 

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  • XxemohatexX
    October 10

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    Taking me at my word thsi is the only ine that confused me and i love the thoughts for the poem you can make the title so silly and fit a intence adn dark topic so well great work someday i will learn somethnig from you adn i will be able to say that my sucess was all because of youi but i odnt even knmwo who you are <3 adn hugs smiles and tears keep up the great work

  • catseye
    October 9

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    I loved the title to this. It brings a whole new meaning to the title. I love your writing style it is so unique and always has beautiful and ironic twists at the end

  • breakdown-beatdown
    October 9
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    dude this is really good !


  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    October 9

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    Interesting Title

    I am having a difficult time pinning the title to the piece, however, the piece is intense and full of meaning. It has a very distinct underlying message as well. Great write. Yours in poetry, gypsy
  • trekkergirl silver member
    October 8
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    oh this sounds just like something I would say to my husband. Good job

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