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Love's Tempest


and the wind whispers your name
hushed tones of hallowed reverence
reverberate like the soft song
of the silent hummingbird

and the breeze billows the same
a soothing calm as serenity concentrates
like the drenching caress
of dew drop's morning rain

and the current calls again
dancing upon the chorus of echoes everlasting
like the tender touch
of a sunset's showering fame

finally, gusts generate the flame
amidst an air of benevolence
as it bequeaths my breath

 

the wind whispers your name...

 

 

 

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  • piccola gold member
    November 27
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    beautiful is the only word I can think of ... wait!
    remarkable ... a gem ... breathtaking. wonderful

  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    November 16

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    I like this I felt the word "the" was over-used in this somewhat (a pet hate of mine) but other than that, this is quite good. I like the imageries you have going on here


  • Doucthepoetinme
    November 15

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    oh and I can see why you were honorably mentioned. This is so warm and inviting, just to come and sit quietly to listen. Soft and serene


  • Leonura silver member
    October 21

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    Oi, I am shocked that a beautiful poem such as this only got a green trophy, this was written so wonderfully. Aye, beautiful.

  • nookie31976 gold member
    October 14

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    This is very mystical and has a whimsical feel to it which makes it really loveable!!! I love your use of words and personification if you will of the many objects you describe throughout this wonderful peice of work. You are a wonderful artist. I myself don't write this way, but I like this style and may try it one day!! Thanks!!!!

    . Rewarded 6


  • remembertobreathe
    October 14

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    Maybe it's just because we're practicing literary devices in my English class at the moment, but the personification was super evident here. I couldn't help but notice, and I can't help but love it.
  • jadeangyal
    October 14

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    My first impression? Enchanting. Then, is this a particular form? I noticed the rhyming of the first line of each stanza. I liked it very much--the form and the poem. The presentation is great, especially the space before the last repeated line, and the fact that there are no caps--soft as the whispering wind.
  • SorenaWinter
    October 14
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    *sigh* such beauty... and not "sappy"... love the way it flows.. effortless


  • lunarlunacy gold member
    October 13
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    What eloquent beauty uplifted to the world and suspended by the spirit of these words.

  • beachhoney9
    October 13
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    LOVE IT.

  • xiaodanxd
    October 13
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    Thanks for whispering deep into my heart...
  • PamelaP
    October 13
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    Beautiful and romantic. Good luck with contest


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    October 12

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    this was a very romantic write here i think you did a great job good luck in the contest
  • trekkergirl silver member
    October 12
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    very well written I love how different things whisper your name. Great job!


  • azlyn gold member
    October 12

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    Simply beautiful Hun...flows like an emrald stream...such a treasure that heart of yours.

    Blessed be~

  • strawberryswing
    October 12
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    I have to say, this poem has very pretty rhythm and bounce to it. Good job!

  • Arjuna-
    October 12
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    This is beautiful. The flow and the rhythm are excellent.


  • flowerfish78
    October 12
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    beautiful, amazing, your words flow so smooth and serene.Excellent poem.

  • luna-midnight gold member
    October 12

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    yay! congrats on being on the front page thing , i told you this was awesome

  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    October 11

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    Thank You For Entering

    This is a very beautifully penned poem you have written here poet. I do like how you incorporate the title as the beginning of your opening line and really make this piece flow beautifully. furthermore I liked the over all depth quality and the poem itself. any ways a very well penned poem. good work and good luck

  • superstition
    October 10

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    Oh wow. I think this poem is absolutely fantastic!! It just floats within the mind like the whispering winds you mentioned in the penning. I really like how you have the last word of each first stanza rhyming amongst themselves...it seems to make it flow that much better. Excellent job!


  • JinSays gold member
    October 10

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    Makes me cry. How beautiful is this man's soul? You're not for real. You can't be.
    What can any hotblooded woman say to words spilling forth, from this level of eloquence?
    Is there nothing you can't write about?
    Amazing.
    Absolutely beautiful,
    jin


  • thejollytinker gold member
    October 10

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    You certainly know your way around thread. Very well held together, pop, no kidding. Suds are on uh, that guy- at the end of the bar...


  • Scrunter gold member
    October 9

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    Wow...What can I say. This is the most beautiful piece I have read in a long while. Truly wonderful. Good luck in the contest. A winner in my eyes.


  • PhantomsAngel87 Greeters member
    October 9
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    I can think of no words worthy enough to comment


  • lencio-sunchild gold member
    October 9

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    like a song! so smooth and nice. I think now when I need my peace of mind I will come here as I always go to the pages of Jane and Joy and Anna, my friends here on AP, they write marvellous poetry too.

    All the best for the contest, it should win!

    Love and light,
    Lencio


  • Angelflower Greeters member
    October 9

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    This was really beautiful hun.. something that really speaks of how beautiful your heart really is.. bravo my dear..

    Angel

  • jasminerose gold member
    October 8

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    Beautiful touching piece penned straight from the heart! Your words grace along the pages into sighs~
    Just absolutely lovely!!
    Linda


  • Stardust-luvr
    October 8

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    tears spill from my soul as i read this - i am speechless for many reasons as I know what its like to have feelings for someone very dear and close to the heart but yet soooooo far. well done and many hugs my friend many blessings always xxxx


  • aboomer silver member
    October 8
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    All I can say is.....BEAUTIFUL!!!

    best wishes in your contest.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 8

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    Your quill knows how to spill such beauty...



    No one writes like you or can express these kinds of feelings better than you...

    This is beyond gorgeous

    ♥


  • luna-midnight gold member
    October 8
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    wow...this is amazing
    good luck in the contest and keep writting.
    Stephanie ♥


  • jcat gold member
    October 8

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    Well all I can say that whoever this lady is is crazy for having not snatched you up!!! But I think that I speak for all of us girls on here when I say that I am glad she hasn't cause than we can all read your most beautiful words, close our eyes and dream that they were for us!!! You just have a way of capturing the hearts of your female readers and making us sigh in the hopes of hearing this in truth one day!! Wonderful as always.....


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    October 8

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    This is so lovely,

    Lay adrift on a boat with the sea at ease, my eyes closed and the sun resting on me, your poem caresses me and sings the melody of peaceful serenity. Beautiful sweeps as always,

     

     

    Mr. Master grand Poet

     

    Rend

     


  • delightfulmess gold member
    October 8

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    awe... this is so soft and endearing.
    Very beautiful my friend. Best of luck in the contest.


    Delila


  • moon2u silver member
    October 8

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    inally, gusts generate the flame
    amidst an air of benevolence
    as it bequeaths my breath


    the wind whispers your name...

    I love this part, it is a gorgeous write Rob

    hugs Moony
    good luck


  • sensualbutterfly silver member
    October 8
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    Now that is the ultimate love poem! So soft and sensual! Romantically sweet! Great Job

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