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Hello!

Hello!
Hello.
You look good today.
I can't say the same
But I don't care for you anymore.
Why don't you care?
Because I want to hand you this knife.
And I want you to do me a favor.
Grab it,
Thrust it with force at my heart,
And take it,
I have no use of it,
tell me if you find only part of it though.
I guarantee you might only find part.

Since someone already took part,

because they couldn't handle the rest.

Why don't you want it anymore?

Because it's pointless.

Wouldn't you rather be lonely?

Instead of being hurt?

You may think it's wrong to think this but your the one that's wrong.

 

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  • sexyvampire1
    October 9

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    Very good!!!

    This was very well written, and very emotional. I liked how you said
    "I guarantee you might only find part.

    Since someone already took part,

    because they couldn't handle the rest"
    I have felt like this too, because apparently I love too hard. For one person, I am just too much, but over time it gets better. At least it did for me. He was an a**hole.

  • AnGeL WiNgS
    October 8

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    omg!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    KEEP UP YOUR TALLELLENT CUS YOU HAVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i LOVE IT

  • poptartxpunk
    October 8
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    DAYUM!

    I likes ittt (: