uno.
various places
flit birdlike:
inside McDonald's
outside a parking lot
dirty laundry
stacks
trench coat thoughts
concealed
- I'm not that obvious
my eyes are seamless glances
like steady hands and cameras
though I can never zoom enough
dos.
absence of matter
walks sideways
manages to occupy space
despite moth tendencies
to die
from excess perfection
finally witnessed
but death is overrated
and so is life
tres.
I can tell his clothes
aren't thrifty
like midnight and jeans
combined for an ensemble -
effortless
expensive
as the little brush
paints
more delicately than
wings
Author notes
La fromage. (I assume it's 'la', since Lex wrote that ... I originally had "le fromage".)
Roo: I was inspired by your Spanish vignettes.
Obviously, yours are ∞ better. 
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I meant to enter this in sheltered's contest,
but I forgot to after I saved it as a draft ...
Meh, I would've written it anyway.
In a list
I want a chocolate-glazed donut.
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I found the Spanish distracting - I understand why you did it, but I think these vignettes would be nice # with the i, ii, iii =)
I absolutely love vignette iii, very strong=)
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The Spanish stays, but thanks for the critique.
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First thing I'm thinking is.. does she know how to be subtle? Full bodied but is no cheese. Tres, yes I like tres da bestest. At the risk of sounding pretentious three sounds like me.
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Do I know how to be subtle?
HAHAHAHA,
I think that "she" knows.
You wear expensive clothes
that look amazing on you?
LMAO
Thanks
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I have a three $300 pair of jeans
a $160 shirt $250 jeans $90 t-shirt
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LMAO, you vain vain man.
Aren't you an electrician?
Does that pay shitloads or something?
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most old men like me get a sports car
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LMAO!!!
I want an Aston Martin.
I can't even freaking drive.
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I have a big old family van
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Family=majorly overrated
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i'd have to have a yard sale
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I have no maternal instinct.!
How about ... sticking them in a bonfire?
LMAO.
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You will burn in hell
on a stick
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Hell isn't too shabby.
Got those flames.
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interesting
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and one to grow on...
You sell yourself short girl. Talent lives in your mind and pours through your fingers.
I would break it all down, but I suck right now as a person.
♥Becky♥
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Aw thank you...
You do not suck--not noodles, and not as a person.
I loved your comment.
Heightwise, I am 5"1.
Awesome, huh?
I don't sell myself short...
I am short.
Okay, that was some lame ass wordplay.
Thanks
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Oh wish I knew some of those ~trench coat thoughts~ Better that they be kelt concealed? (U can pm me some if u want)
~absence of matter
walks sideways
manages to occupy space~ like the walking sideways, and how it occupy's space like in our thoughts.
but death is overrated-- read my poem titled Standing Soldiers.
like midnight and jeans: only the skinney can pull this off.
Now the drumroll!!!~~as the little brush
paints
more delicately than
wings- only from the eye of an artist.
Enjoyed this walk thru spanish .001
Joe
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I got a VERY disturbing innuendo from what you said about "trench coat thoughts"--LMAO.
It's not dirty.
LoL, just to clarify.
I love Spanish.
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La fromage
life and death are both
underoverrated
like birdlike flu
in warious beaks
their song
-- a beacon for the unsaid chease
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It's 'la', not 'le'?
Damn, thanks for the French lesson Lex!
Loved your not-so-cheesy ditty.
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I'm not sure
depends if wether the french cheese is a boy or a girl
somehow it translates like mr.cheezy
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That is so deep.
I changed it to 'la'.
LoL...
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in Latin based languages substantives have gender
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Draco dormiens nunquam titillandus.
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Yeah, basically.
Are you a Latin expert
or a fan of Harry Pothead?
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I don't believe in harry potter
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I've read the original version
it's called hairy pothead
had as bonus a magic tool for understanding misunderstood langauges
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Drink some water dude.
Even villains need
to fulfill their thirst.
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I can't spit fire if I drink water
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never tickle me!!!
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mine was in french
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Is the contest finished?? Cause this
Damn girl.. you are brill.. *is jealous*
I'd say more.. honestly.. but you know the state I'm in right now..
Love it !
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No, I saved it as a draft and totally forgot to enter it...
LMAO.
Thanks
No need for jealousy--put it on a coat rack and send me chocolate care of mail instead.
Your comments always rock my face off!!! -
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Gonna get the choc tomorrow now that ACC paid me
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Hehe, and some for yourself ... of course
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