Should I allow the world to pass me by, given that I’ve
already died, would it matter if my cries of sorrow went
by unnoticed, given that rigor mortis has already set in
Like who should even care to look within, this life born
from sin, this life torn into nothing, thrown aside as if
rubbish one puts into a bin
Paranoia driven I am, man forsaken by the already
condemned, taken into a trivial marriage of nations
I’ll never understand
From this my inner madness stems, cries for a
helping hand. It’s all caused by the laws of the land,
that’s what I believe to mutate the disease within,
given that I lie dead in a sad world of sin, believing
only the truth of my own fears
An effigy of wonder I journeyed far to see, and as I
sort to ponder there my past year, I realized nothing
notable within myself to revere, just a mind full of
empty desire, lost inside my fortified empire
A mountain of delusion, a lifetime of confusion, deluding
only myself through a life of dissatisfaction. Living inside
shadows, living in a world full of sorrow, and no hope for
tomorrow, too mortified to even want to change, lost
inside this swell of strange urges, splurging forth on
savage desires left of centre
Enter there the nuclear winter, demented air of sinister
misgivings. Delusions from within, living a life in deadly
sin, harvesting whatever I desire from the depths of my
mind. Crimes done to find my way, blind ambition to
nowhere but doomsday, raped and afraid
Just because I don’t agree with you, just because I do not
follow your truth, I am condemned to a life unworthy,
Killing myself inside just to be like you, killing my mind
for nothing new
In every dream I sort to pursue a thing or two created by
you, then the fires inside burned my desire, left me on this
dump to expire, so understand why I now conspire against
you, and take my mind to a place of ultimate value
Trying to right this unavoidable truth, a truth I believed
due to fear, this life I lived in a sea of running tears, left
for dead in every year, that l do dread more than anything
already revealed, trapped within a mountain of confusion
concealed, unwilling to spin on the wheel of truth, raped
and afraid because of you
Delusions from within, taking me into future sins,
trampled on by minds of steel, jungle warriors to
push me into overkill, true visionaries of mans
future history, and you who made me replaceable,
should I suffer this living death unconditional, give
my pitiable life away to nothing but silent sorrow,
killing any chance at a novel tomorrow
Oh I could cry all night long, holding onto a heart so
wronged, and thinking of dollars I need to just belong
Maybe I am the wrong colour, maybe I should have
been taller, or just maybe if I had a sensible lover
Given that I’ve never lived life in elixir moments,
could I fake the torment from years done and shine
in times to come
Given that my life lies in slum, should it matter if
death took me from that progressive sin. Well
who do I blame for this explained, these delusions
from within
Author notes
You are what you eat, and life takes you wherever you steer. Nobody is to blame for how your life sucks or thrives. Inspiration comes from those who just exist and don't live life to its fullest.
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Thank you for enteriny my "Celebrating Poetry and Poets" competition. I ave to say, though, that this is really rather far from the subject - there is no specific indication that the person speaking IS a poet -and even if he is intended to be, this poem is hardly celebratory. So although it is a piece that could very well be successful in other Allpoetry competitions - and I wish you every success with it - I feel that for this paricular competition it really is a non-starter.
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Killing myself inside just to be like you, killing my mind for nothing new. (love this bit)
This is writen like a poem but its layed out one line running into the next like a story so which is it? For the sake of this contest I'll go with poem but I'd recomend fixing the formatting so that it looks more like stanzas and less like paragraphs (just my observations.)
You seem to have word selection down pact, your words seem to fit perfectly with one another to convay your feelings and opinions. You are one with a good grasp on the proper uses of words in order to convay exactly what it is you wish to say. There are many (including myself) who wish that they could do that.
Thank you for entering my contest. -
this was beautiful, very intense. i loved it. thanx for entering and good luck.
*hugs* tay/tess.
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The rhyming in this piece really appealed to me; it's 'right-up-my-alley' kind of stuff. The message was full and bubbling to boiling-point with unanswered questions. A lot of great lines here; it flowed well and it had such a coarse feel of irony to it...nice touch. I think this was one of the most interesting 'delusional-feeling' excursions I've been on so far (well, actually it's the only one...). A good write here.
AsIThink....
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Awesome!
This is a full-packed as the jars my mother used to can of tomatoes and pickles and peaches and pears, right to the top, brimming over with vinegar and alum and sweet sauces... and they needed at least a winter to savor! Very provocative and evocative...written so clearly and yet one must re-read to catch the internal rhymes and hidden meanings. Word choices are sometimes unusual, but nothing I'd complain about -- it's all good! Thank you for posting!
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this is such a prolific and thought provoking write although i am so sorry to have cost you points as i think i may have commented before. This is a great topic for a poem refreshingly different, and the poem has a great flow sort of runs on its own with lots of interesting volcabulary and words complimenting each other like parts of a well chosen menu thanks for sharing littlefishone
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such truth lies in these words... i was glad to see your authors comments at the end. keep living life to its fullest,
hugs,
georgie,
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ty & gl
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Wow...this is such a good
I sat here and read it, then read it again and again. Very deep and thought provoking write for sure. I give it the 
Very, very well penned indeed. I salute you my fellow Aussie
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This is very prolific and very thought provoking,I kind of live a little on the outside as my way of life does notconform, although as I tell my kids there are more similarities than differences if people chooseto look. There is a clarity and strength about this work that just makes me go wow good write littlefishone
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"Just because I don’t agree with you, just because I do not
follow your truth, I am condemned to a life unworthy "
Those lines summed it all up entirely for me; so often this happens, you state your views [for your own personal reasons] which happen to go against the grain and instantly get set upon, shot down, and humiliated simply for having your own mind.
Couldn't have said it better myself!
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