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Spring

Life comes from the spring
The water that heals us all-
After winter's death

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Note to contest leader: You said you dislike poems, especcialy short ones, I am entering this but not expecting to win.

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  • Ryno silver member
    November 15
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    hmmm.. not feeling it,
    but i like the idea
    ~prewrites, come and get them

  • myrataal silver member
    October 14
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    Apostrophe Apostrophe ...

    and all else perfect ...

    winter's I mean.

    You are quite the poet.
    Love
    Myra


  • LongPatrol
    October 11

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    I most certaintly like poems. But true, I do not like short ones, except haikus. This is a haiku. The syllables are perfect. My favorite lines are the last two:
    "The water that heals us all-
    After winters death "
    It's a nice metephore. Good job, and I'm glad you entered, not just to win, but for fun.
    -LongPatrol

  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    October 9

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    wonderful

    I love how you used metaphor in this piece. Haiku istricky, for you must be able to capture strong emotions in such short margins. Great one. Yours in poetry, gypsy

  • Candy6
    October 9
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    True. Nice haiku.
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