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Im crying coz....

im crying coz im sad you would leave
im crying coz im in pain
im crying coz you ignored my plead
now a lesson that you've gained

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this is really short..any ideas in how to make it longer?

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  • Flitzy
    October 12

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    ok then, i am waitin to see the rest of it..good luck..how about something like?
    I am crying coz of the heart that crashed me down
    I am crying coz of my weep, without a sound
    I am crying within coz of myself, for isolation tore me up...

    Good luck buddy..

  • Flitzy
    October 12
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    i wished u would continue this piece..its a great start, but short coz i know it will read great if u can ellaborate on it...good try though

    • muzic.is.life
      October 12
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      thnx for the advice i am planning on making it longer just need some inspiration!!! thanx.....~music.is.life~