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dirt

aching
      for lips
      of cotton,
      silk

      for farmer's hands
      firmly sowing
her landscape

quakes

-whisper
hot hallelujahs
on my skin-

Author notes

prompt: 20 words about seduction

work in progress

Written October 10th, 2008

    I plan to revise this poem, please leave constructive criticism!
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  • StarGrrl
    November 29
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    Nice. I like the topic, very interesting for the prompt. I like the style too.

  • tomisb
    October 24

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    This is so energetically sensual, earthy and raw and so completely integrated with its own casual strength that it is both delightful to read and sexy as hell. There is a self-possessed feeling of non-chalance that makes it become more than a giggle and an innuendo. Instead it is like its title, simple, often washed off little boys, but flourishes in the right hands.
    Love,
    Tom B.

  • Yvette Champ
    October 10

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    Now, this is how to plough the fields and scatter sensations across the body of the land.

    Liked the hot hallelujahs on the skin, mercy me!

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    October 10

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    Oh wow hrmmm
    Thank you muchly for taking the time to enter this into my contest best wishes always be well