I remember those days
When i start writing verses
My verses were all about
princes,princess and monster's curses
Then I also remember those days
When i start writing stories
everybody was happy with me
because of my stories
What did you think
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construxtive criticism?
I personally know you, but this is the first time i remember reading any of your poems...but still, you ask for constructive criticism so here i go...
*sight*
You really need to revise your poem, it lacks your emotions and the reality touch. It's just like a bunch of sentences and nothing more. It should be poetry, poetry that comes from within you, from the depth of your heart.
You should enjoy writing poetry. try to get lost in it. Reflect your emotions. That way, we'll also like to read your poem again and again and feel its beauty.
I won't be too harch. Just the simple stuff now but you certainly need to practise on your poetry.
Poetry are not mere verses
They are the reflection of your heart
The beauty of your dreams
The flow of your thoughts
I just made up the above pieces of poetry. he he.
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