Your gentle hands contrast
with the coarse hemp rope
as I feel you bind me.
Dream like, I listen to your
murmured words
as with each tug
I feel myself drawing
closer to you.
It is not domination,
it is submission.
It is not binding,
it is uniting.
it is not yielding,
it is trust.
I feel a rush
of excitement,
in my nipples
in the small shivers
of anticipation
as I await your pleasure.
Soon,
you will take me
in a thousand ways
with your warm mouth
with your firm hands
with your hardness…
and I will find ecstasy
and ultimate freedom
from the bondage
of myself.
Author notes
Prompt: Surrender
Picture Credit: http://truffinthebox.deviantart.com/art/Surrender-20607122
No line limit – just write!
A contest entry
- Points giveaway... by kiwigirljacks.
1800 points, ended October 14, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Comments Always Welcome but I Won't Turn Down Fluffy One's Either :D
Comments
1 - 12 of 12
-
mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm VERY good.. Got my attention.. Awesome. I love the way tou think..
-
I must admit, this is a wonderful way of putting it without becoming vulger. Great job!
-
-
That's the beauty of poetry... obviously, I'm not a woman nor am I into bondage... but I can empathize... put myself into someone else's place... and try and feel what they do. Comments let me know if I'm close or not... and I think this one came close. It helps in trying to understand all the "oddness" that we see if we can make sense of it...
Thank you for the read and comment... Speaking of "oddness", try "A dozen roses" It's a very funny true story. Laughter is everywhere!
Ken
-
-
Now I should have known you'd go this way with that prompt 
lol
I really like how you did it from her perspective and you captured what is really the true sense of surrender in a dom/sub situation...
Excellent!
-
This is one poem that does being a submissive soul good to see, for that is just what it is like, for it is the trust, submission, and the feeling of being set free by being tied and own.
For a heart cannot be totally free, if it has not been Claimed and own.
Riftkin
-
"It is not domination,
it is submission.
It is not binding,
it is uniting.
it is not yielding,
it is trust."
That's my favorite stanza.
I hate erotica, but I really do enjoy this piece.
Good luck in the contest! ♥
-Rainbow. -
I really really love this poem that you've written.. I've read it several times over before making a comment. interesting take on the prompt. it didn't go where I thought that it might.You have a wonderful talent for writing erotic poems. You've got another amazing poem here. I love the last stanza a lot.
good luck in the contest my lover
kat
-
Sensual brilliance so softly written.
Desiring the surrender to times waiting
Best wishes and good luck
Julie
-
WOW! I am generally not a big fan of erotica poetry (dont get me wrong, I love eroticism and the genuine practice of it, just not most poems about it), BUT, this was truly arousing and engaging. Made the mind buzz and the blood vehemently flow south. VERY WELL DONE.
-
What can I say.... another great one here
-
-
Awwww thank you dear...
-
-
Awesome work here and I love
this unique format. Great job
and thanks a lot for your comment
on mine. Good luck to you!
Jeremy0826
Adding your comment:
1 - 12 of 12
