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Surrendering to the Echoes

reverberating laughter of maniacal monkees
exhaling horrors with horrendous halitosis
just a poet constipated by in-consonance
nevermind inconstinance
bellowing bong hits into a barrage of blasphemy
while I shoot my muse the finger

remember - never bite your nails with sticky fingers
its just unsanitary to preach sanctimony in a sanitarium

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  • jcat gold member
    October 12

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    Halitosis!!!! I haven't seen that word since med school...Oh!! wait thats right I didn't go to med school but that word still rocks!! The ripe smell of death eminatting from the oral orifice....Well thanks for that....superb smell by the way!! Can't get it out of my nose now


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 11

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    This is too funny!! Some excellent word play going on in there and alliteration or what?!?! lol

    Cool!


  • KayJay silver member
    October 10

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    An allegorical alliteration of astronomical proportions (or something like that ) Well done and best of luck...
    Ken


    • lunarlunacy gold member
      October 10
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      thanx Ken, same to ya! look forward to seein what you come up with for this. I just love kiwi quickies, they draw a great crowd.