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Reality of Love

Mispronounced I heard you
clearly enough speaking into
the negative space between us

a whisper becomes a shout
becomes a cry for mercy
when the timing turns right
impressions wear away
soft as your shadow above me
in the moonlight shining
through your vacant heart

an infinitive phrase

to keep watch with to keep time 
to blot out the nothing that comes

with the rising sun

 

(c) Nevadapoet

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  • Velvet Rose Petals
    October 11

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    how sad... im very sorry. i like how you formatted this picture and the backround is so pretty. I love that is it short and to the point. hopefully you get your love soon...
    Rose

  • Riamh
    October 11
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    Shelly, this is so beautiful. I love it.

    Slayer


  • Cannonsfire gold member
    October 11

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    The images in this of longing and yearning are lovely, my only suggestion is the rewording of the final stanza, the second line 'with' appears twice which rolls a little awkwardly from the tongue perhaps:

    an infinitive phrase
    to keep watch
    keep time with
    to blot out the nothing
    that comes with the sun

    C


    • nevadapoet
      October 11
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      Thank you as always for the read and comments...I took your suggestion and changed the last stanza slightly...thanks for the advise.
      Shelly