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...my dreamworld...

I have left behind my body.
suddenly i was gone...
i don't hear anyone talking...
where I am now it is more beautiful.
pain and grieve do not exist...
others are frightened of it...
but that's not necessary...
because where i am it's peaceful...
but i am not intirely...
just as a clear moment...
they call your name,
but there you go again.
at last you're back...
they are watching very provides to you...
they want to know what you see and feel if you are there.
you know that you've been there...
but what did they told you,
why are they staring at you this way?
waiting for an answer...
do they think that you hear it?
at last you can say something.
you have the chance of explaining something.
but you don't know how...
because that world is just for you...
you're just talking something around it...
what you see, you're not telling them...
because where you are there are you alone.
you're passing away there automatically,
if it becomes all too difficult.
if your world has collapsed.




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  • eternalmirror
    October 11
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    hi
    thank you for your lovely words...
    i have the idea,
    that you've seen the lifelesson,
    i wants the humanity to realize...
    that life isn't about roses...
    it's hard and difficult...
    it's all part of the wheel...
    thank you so much!
  • If I was a ghost
    October 11

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    It's like dreaming here, your own world, wandering away to that beautiful place, that only you can see and feel...

    Amazing write as always from you...