the dark room with only one light:
i've lost my sight.
my clock doesn't keep time:
because i've lost my mind.
the insanity of my appearance:
red and white paint on my face,
sweating pores making it
drip across my nose and cheeks.
my greedy smile and blood-stained teeth.
in my nocturnal eyes, dripping paint stings.
blind. vision unnecessary:taste necessary.
red, red, red, red.
colors, lust, dread.
red blood, red paint.
white skin, white paint.
pink.
sweet, sweet
pink.
the mixture dripping to the floor,
my tongue a blood-loving whore.
red, red, red, white.
pink.
iron-flavored condiment,
slippery when gushing.
rusty pipes reopened,
flooding my mouth:
i could drown.
animal rage is the next stage:
teeth gripping, ripping, pinching.
skin ripping, deracinated from the veins, meat.
like tree roots from the ground, strain.
meat rare, meat
pink.
red, red, white, white.
taste the blood, taste the
pink.
Author notes
B. Lucas;
Caught up in this madness too blind to see
Woke animal feelings in me
Took over my sense and I lost control
I'll taste your blood tonight
~Scream by Avenged Sevenfold~
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A contest entry
- The Darkwrite Challenge Round II by Ktulu Blackwolfe.
800 points, ended October 25, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I'm not exactly sure of...this makes me smile happily. Sigh in content...A brilliant fucking gorgeous piece. Sorry for the explicit...I find I cannot tell you to edit anything for this is just...utilizing the full spectrum of human emotion and literary devices.
There is some very interesting moments:
the mixture dripping to the floor,
my tongue a blood-loving whore.
This ingenious stanza was brilliant:
the insanity of my appearance:
red and white paint on my face,
sweating pores making it
drip across my nose and cheeks.
my greedy smile and blood-stained teeth.
in my nocturnal eyes, dripping paint stings.
blind. vision unnecessary:taste necessary.
'Nough said. -
Another sick-ish one.
I like it!
Write more poems. You do not have enough.
And I need to see some more.
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wow. for the 1st half of the poem, i was like "What??" and now, i get it.
very niice.
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Very vivid.Really great and i could picture everything in my mind.Nice imagery and great use of colors.It flowed well.
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Awsome!!
Wow i really liked the maddnes in this, very dark and very vivid, loved it!!!!
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I love your take on this prompt. I see what you were saying about the line limit...this will be accepted as is, no adjustment needed.
I do want to point out that there is a line here "vision unnecessary:taste necessary."
I feel that the word necessary is overused here. To use it once and then again two words later just doesn't sound right. Just my opinion though.
**Ktulu Blackwolfe** -
Oh wow this really gave me the shivers!
Excellent take on your prompt.
Thanks for the entry
Gaylene
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