F*ck Life
Burn it all to hell,
Send it to the place,
Where evil souls dwell,
I hate it,
But some people love life,
I want to destroy it,
With the reaper 's scythe,
I want life to suffer,
Like life suffered me,
End it,
At let my soul free,
Some people love it,
But what for?
Money, drugs,
And nuclear war,
Life ain't worth living,
It does't Make any sense,
And look what my soul's is like,
Beaten and tense.
What do you think?
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good
Another good piece, well written and well executed. To me this piece is full of anger and as I read through it I almost found myself spitting out each word, there one or two things that maybe worth changing slightly
'At let my soul free,'
I think that should be 'and let my soul free' its only alittle thing, but you stumble when you read the line and it stops the flow.
Also this line, is a bit of a mouthful, it might be better to cut it down slightly:
'And look what my soul's is like'
Mayeb better as 'And look what my soul's like'
or
'And look what my soul is like'
Thats it, good work
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this is so true i know exactly how you feel
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