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sensation mixes
together with your heartbeat
and those sweating palms

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  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    October 22
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    Nice

    well this is quite a nice well penned poem and I really like the over all depth and flow to this. furhtermore might I add that this Haiku really had my wheels wpinning deep within my mind as I was envisualizing all of this taking place. any ways a very well penned poem and keep up the good work =)


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    October 12
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    Good write!

    This is a wonderful Senryu! Senryu is Haiku form & tells of human nature & emotions. You did an exceptional job here in the 'traditional' 5/7/5 syllable count & conveying the emotion in a very Zen way!
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