Knowledge is the crown you proudly wear
Success the daunting dress you parade in
They can not hide the fact you don’t care
For you have stolen the right to invade in
The privacy and possession of those who
You forced to become dependent on you
Your systems, mechanisms and structures
And the bedlam of laws you have created
Permitting you to manage all that occurs
To accomplish what you have anticipated
You don’t need to ask approval or support
Anyone who is silly enough to oppose you
You can simply disrupt, discredit or abort
There is nothing capable of stopping you
And now that all your tactics are in place
And you in effect possess the human race
There is little to distinguish you from God
Except your empire is immersed in blood
And while putting down the axe you used
To rid yourself of life you brutally abused
You fail to see the sword sway above you
In the hand of one who does not love you
Author notes
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Penetrating!
Oh my....this was not a before bed time, light read! I might have nightmares now! I think you described the signs of the times in this country to the T with this piece. I love the flow, timing, word choice, intensity & bold faced truth of this. The last two lines sum the piece up with sharp clarity! Bravo Chris!
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Brilliant
Chris,
Your poem is deep and thought provoking, society as whole can turn into a cold and brutal world, conforming to this lie, it’s a vicious cycle, wealth that one seeks changes the hearts of man to pure greed, and will step on any back to get there and break it if need be, it devours its own and waits in the dark for you to show your vulnerable side, ready to attack and take your life .No one is exempt if this path they did not heed.I really enjoyed this write it is in all honesty the truth! Sad as It may be, this can happen only if you allow it, but some times it creeps in ever so slowly….
Thank you Chris for this excellent write.
Rend
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very powerful poem. It is filled with clarity and power. the words chosen such as daunting, become dependent,disrupt, discredit or abort, are all very powerful emotional words. I really love the force of the words and the boldness it gives the poem. Great job
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I am not totally sure on how I am supposed to react to this poem.You obviosly feel very passionatly about this subject as I feel all of us need to in the relationship to ourselves and how it relates to us.You have held nothing back and are bruetely honest.You spoke well and we all need to pay attention to this.Great job and keep up the good work.
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These days there is such a cult of wealth that good people have little self-esteem, being deluded by this lie: money is good and more money is better. There is no idea of enough.
"Your systems, mechanisms and structures
And the bedlam of laws you have created" and
"Anyone who is silly enough to oppose you"
finds it nearly impossible to live any other way.
The pace of your poem is relentless and the tone is bleak. Those who do not serve must be removed - many have been already. This is a strongly worded and effective poem, well done.
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Intense, slashing, truth ...
the two lines that sprang out to me are these:
There is little to distinguish you from God
Except your empire is immersed in blood
The very supreme and seemingly pristine power will come as the Angel of Light, but will be completely rotten to the core. And YES! The Children of God will NOT be deluded!
We are embedded inside his Will and HIS WILL is that we will be freed from the tyranny of evil.
Evil is slain already, and on his forehead is written ETERNAL DEATH.
Ack
Myra
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From awakening dreams, I see visions like your view.
You speak bold of darkness like the voice of thunder, super real Messenger of Light.
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Wow! Complex and filled with meaning. You kept the rhythm going and this is a very fine poem.
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