Dare she walk on through the door,
the other side is dark
Void of goodness; evil lives,
the contrast very stark
Not happy in the realm she dwells,
a change is what she seeks
But through that door a foul stench,
an outlook very bleak
She pauses here to think on it,
her next step may be her last
The black it seems to go on forever,
can it wipe away her past
This world of hers though sometimes cruel,
gives her a chance to choose
The next one there, she’ll have no choice,
she has everything to lose
Forsaken by those she loved the most,
left alone to cope with loss
It did not make her strong within,
did not help her bear her cross
Solitude has choked her soul,
mind filled with so much pain
A blackened heart upon her sleeve,
in her chest ashes remain
She’ll take that step and throw away,
any chance she’s ever had
For the sake of showing them,
her dear old mom and dad
She walks on in and turns around,
the gates are sealed closed
A voice rings out, it beckons her,
so; it’s Hell you chose
Her breath is gone her body limp,
she’s sealed her fate for sure
No one can save her from herself
for that there is no cure
On the bathroom floor, in pools of blood,
null of any life at all
Compared to the Hell, where now she lives,
her troubles were pretty small
Author notes
The_Magic_Door_by_ArwensGrace Prompt At deviantart.com(self hurt,suicide)
A contest entry
- Graphic Dark Writes by November-Dani.
800 points, ended October 14, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is great, i love it, i really enjoyed reading it. But I dont think that it was graphicly gory enough for me. But the last verse was awesome. Really got me.
Thanks for entering.
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Wow! I'm blown away, this is an exceptional piece of literature.I could see the whole story as it played out in my head.I love the flow too. It held me there captive until the end.Excellent work.
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wow, you are really something if you just began to write and can come up with this, it's a great story, the only crit I can give is that some of the rhyming doesn't flow, if you get a flow in your head and try and read the whole thing in the rhythm, I think you will see what I mean that some of it doesn't sound quite right, great poem though.
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Thank you for your comments I reread the poem and changed a few things but alas I read very poorly and I am sure I've missed at least a few things. Thanks again, Boog
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Wow ! !
A very dark write you have penned here. An excellent take on the given picture prompt. Best of luck in this contest
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