I've got a theory
neither earth-shaking nor scientific
lab coats try to figure out life as
I try to find the reason
why every exaggeration feels like truth
extended for melodic drama -
can you hear the clash?
piano notes made to sound like harp strings
a hypothesis:
nothing
is
what
it
seems
short line breaks chop thoughts
like this is
how
I
wanted
them:
broken and scattered
when circadian rhythm rebels
against streams of consciousness
because beauty is different
for the same people
walking in voluntary uniforms
so you can sustain that "what the fuck"
stop reading now or
leave it hanging like wet laundry
that's dry the next morning
and swear to a dead god
this poem
is more like prose
Author notes
Prokofiev's "Harp" Prelude in C Major
A piano piece that does sound like harp strings, or when played well, it does. 
I played this in Gr. 10 Piano, and it sounded like crap [I'm not saying that to be humble, I'm being freaking honest].
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I don't care.
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Let It Rock-Kevin Rudolph ft. Lil' Wayne (Lil' Wayne sucks ass)
I've Got a Theory-Buffy the Vampire Slayer 
In a list
I absorb truth, radiate back lies.
Comments
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I read that first line and I just knew I had heard it before, go buffy I agree with jacks, your descriptions are kick ass, it is so refershing to read you, never know what I'll get, which I love! A stunning piece
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Stunning?
LMAO
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Nothing wrong with the word stunning!
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I just disagree. LMAO
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OK WTF!!!! I DID comment on this !!
<== still love the two year old
*tries to remember other comment*
You know.. people exaggerate for a reason! That there is always truth behind the exaggeration I believe...
Love the reference to that piece of music!
"broken and scattered
when circadian rhythm rebels
against streams of consciousness" <== whoa I love that!!! *wants to steal it*
"leave it hanging like wet laundry
that's dry the next morning" <== see!! I told you your descriptions were kick ass!!
I disagree with the comment below... I really got into the first few stanzas!
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<==he is useful and sympathetic
LoL, you can steal it
and use it in a much better way than I ever could...
I think that'd work for you next "Coloured Medicated Madness" poem.
LoL...Palkowski [below] is an honest guy and his poems murder me with their goodness.
Course, so do you (substitute 'guy' for 'non-guy')
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your ending stanza was stong & full of connotational radiance.
however i dont echo the prevous comments as i just didn't get in to the first couple of stanzas
i agree with your theory.
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I agree with you; I adore you and your honesty.
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~I've got a theory
neither earth-shaking nor scientific~ but it's specific
~lab coats try to figure out life as
I try to find the reason
why every exaggeration feels like truth
extended for melodic drama -
can you hear the clash?~ I wear a LAB coat for work sometimes, but I know all about exaggeration!
~short line breaks chop thoughts
like this is
how
I
wanted
them~ I never know about my line breaks(as pointed out by you) Is there a class on them ?lol
~this poem
is more like prose~ I proprose it to be.
Nice poem.
BTW what grade you in now? (I was 13 in the fifth grade) Had to burn the school down to get out.
Joe
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15 = gr. 10
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damn.
I love this.
even though I can barely come up with a more decent comment with some more word-meat in it.
I apologise.
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No apology needed, C.
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LOL! smiles that was very cute-Jess, you do great work!
You say you “believe” this to be prose?
but-then again- who of us truly knows?
Then it appears you have held a theory
Which to think of makes you very weary
Of agonizing melodic drama,
concerning that silly misplaced comma.
While your fingers brush up on keyboard notes
your imagination talent-promotes
Thus never worry about choppy thought
as no need to become overwrought
For we on AP think that you are swell
because you sure the hell know how to spell!
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Cute?
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the ending made me smile devilishly
cool title
third stanza was awesome
love the word "hypothesis" and the way you placed it
"short line breaks chop thoughts" like the way this does what it says
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The third stanza sucks!!! LMAO
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shock therapy tickles sensitivity
makes believe or adapt
even if sometimes
less is more
but who needs sophistications like that
when everybody knows
even if
manuals are all for common users
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Sophistication...what a word.
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Genius
Amazing write, to say the least, and a read that hooks one by the ears like a catchy tune...pleasing to the senses up to the final word...genius.
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Hardly...thank you.
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...but you are, at least when it comes to making poetry.
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This is a stunning poem - right up my alley with the lab coats and hypothesising ... the ending is an extension of that book line we were talking about before - and damn ... you can say it better than anyone I've ever met! I love the 'poet aware of poem' part of this - very nicely done with similar effect to breaking the fourth wall
You come chilled in a semicolon glass!
Llly
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Stunning? *queasy*
Soon as I posted it, I felt...urky.<==should be a real word
Hahahahahaha, I completely abandoned punctuation for this one!! (I usually do, but the last few poems I've written have used punctuation
) But I do like semicolons.
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You don't like the word stunning? I meant it literally ... kind of a "woah, I'm stunned and for the first time today words are not floating out of my mouth to pollute the air with their vague niceties"
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LMFAO! No, just that the word doesn't apply to this poem.
'stunning' is a stunning word.
"vague niceties"<==me gusta!
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You played Prokofiev in 10th grade Even if it was bad it would have been amazing, it's not chopsticks!!! This is like a piece in sharps and flats rather than melodic because it comes from you trying to discern what life is actually for or why we are even here, but it will just give you headaches like most of the classics do to me lol...stay numb and survive C
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"Even if it was bad it would have been amazing"
LMFAO!! Therein lies the paradox much?!!!
Thanks.
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