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~*~Take her pain~*~

I just don't know what to say
To alleviate her pain

Inside wasting away

All I do just seems in vain

 

I see and feel her tears

Way too many for her years

But there's nothing I can do

To show my thoughts are true

 

When she hurts it makes me ache

All her pain I want to take

But I can't take back the years

That have caused her pain and tears

 

The mistakes that I have made

That have left her, oh so jaded

Now she trusts nothing I say

Because we both have lost our way

 

I just want to hold her close

Eliminate the ghosts

That haunt her day and night

And contribute to her strife

 

She can't even see the love

That I hold for her above

My own life and all else here

Please, God, take her pain and fear

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For my beautiful daughter, Mariah, how I wish I could take all her pain.

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  • Ademon gold member
    January 2
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    Wow, such passion and heart is felt in this write...reaching out and crying out...Beautiful! Excellent write and congrats on the shiny!


  • chasitylee
    January 1
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    awe..

    wow, i love it, very powerful,...i went through every line and never lost interest....love it

    much love,
    Chasity♥

  • Forever Hated
    November 6, 2008
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    Wow

    This is beautiful. i really enjoyed this write, and congrats on second place in the contest.


  • Dragonbabyx3
    November 4, 2008

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    I wish my parents would say something like that to me, But alas, they wouldnt. One question, What position would you like in my AP Family?

  • Trisha W
    November 3, 2008

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    o my...

    tear jerking!! moving!! awsome write...especially for someone who does not have a mother as passionate as that...thank you for entering..this is def goin' to be at the top!! good luck!


  • krayz18
    November 1, 2008

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    made me cry

    i wish my mom would say that to me. I think you should share this with your daughter it may really help her. I know if my mom were to do this for me i would finally feel that she cared.


  • Xxhidden in lyfxX
    November 1, 2008
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    Wonderful

    How sweet! I hope Mariah realises how special she is towards her mother.

  • Shimano
    November 1, 2008

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    Touching

    To Mariah..you truely have a dad with a heart of gold,may you never forget that

    I draw on this poem,you pen a simple and effective poem that has a central them of love for a loved one...

    It will touch the reader in making ways that one...it has touched me

    Thank you for sharing

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