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Loss Of Senses

Heresy; looked down upon
Pellucid like your eyes
Rotting insides cause dismay
Senses going blind

Prodigal, irresponsible
Your mind sinks like lead
Levity has come to stay
Intelligence: diminutive

Author notes

ow! i just scraped the hell out of my heel on this queer computer chair thing! o well...take wild guess what this is about, its really easy to decode
Written February 2nd, 2004

A contest entry

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  • KayMMIV
    April 7, 2004
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    very true poem. good luck in the contest.

  • isa
    April 2, 2004
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    thank you for entering my contest. good luck!
    -Isa

  • On wings of lead
    February 2, 2004
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    hAhA

    ur such a dumb ass...hey guess who i talked to today...ull never guess. o and its 1208 not 1280...and yes adam brody es muy hot and atreyu rox even tho u didnt mention that
  • roses bleed
    February 2, 2004
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    sweetness

    Is this about drug/alcohol abuse??? Its a little obvious, just like the fact that right now you're watching Grind. Adam Brody is hot and yes MTV shouldnt have cancelled Now What. At least he's on the OC now so we all know what your doing at 9 on Wednesday nights...cough cough, jacket, cough, cough. Hey you were right, 1280 is a good band, im going to watch the video again. The lead singer has a Black Flag shirt, which is a pretty good band. Up for any prank calls? Its monday and i need something to do besides make fun of le bitter prick, everything really does sound prettier in French, even name. So back to my diplomatic review of your poem: in moderation alcohol isnt necessarily bad for you, but many people abuse the vertigo you get from over comsuption and we know what happens after that. As for drugs, well, yeah no need to go that in depth on this subject. How can trust a drug dealer to sell you substances that could potentially kill you? Really that's just ludicrous. Anyways congrads on becoming straight edge, your liver, body, appreciates it. Amy Lee looks really freaky in this video, yeah her voice isnt altered in the studio... And you said i couldnt write a long post!

    I love my pigtails!!!
    Monkey>Dee

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