Love is a lovely word
It’s the best thing I’ve heard
Overall, when push comes to shove
I really hope someday I fall in love
So many people in this world that deserves my love
But to find a person so sent from above
Who I would love and she’d love back
Which love emotions do I lack
That day which I need to love is so near
To be there for her through every tear
I’d love someone who I could learn to respect
If my love were a disease whom would it affect
To keep it honest and so kindly pure
This person would be my cure
Pick her up when she fell down
One so perfect I’d have to crown
Love her daily non-stop
Go through pain and aganee as I watch her shop
Love the every ground she walks on
She’ll vacuum; I’ll mow the lawn
Love to love her is love indeed
To find this girl I need to love is what I need
To be her friend every night and everyday
That she’d love me as I love her, I pray
Hold on to each other so very tight
That kind of love where you can’t sleep at night
Watch her laugh and to watch her smile
Look deeply at each other for a while
I’d cherish every moment we spend together
A little love rain would be perfect weather
Every minute without her my heart will ache
Without her my hands would tremble and shake
A fair friendship is what I long for
To talk to and nothing more
Always lend my ear to listen
I hope nobody walks in on us kissin’
To hold her everyday in my arms
She would be my good luck charm
I wish I find her and find her quick
Send me the right one, God you pick
One so great and rich in beauty
Save the brightest one for me
Love to love her is love indeed
To find this girl I need to love is what I need
Love for me I think can wait
I’ll just leave things all up to fate
Author notes
Helloooooo baby
Written February 11th, 2004
A contest entry
- Love and being in love by Drummin Poet.
300 points, ended May 9, 2004, 21 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Mushy, Longing for Lovin'!
this is my favorite part from my experiences!
Watch her laugh and to watch her smile
Look deeply at each other for a while
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Nicely Done
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Wow, Mr. Drewce!
After thoroughly reading your page I surely wanted to read this poem.
And now all I can say is Wow! Good thing it is getting published - it is very beautiful, more on the side of its idea, than on the technical side (your rhyme is sometimes uneven). But it is so enjoyable and so Wow! There are just so many juicy metaphors and epithet and it is so easy to visualise what you are writing about.
Hopefully one day you'll find this girl of your dreams - it is something we all want - to find someone special with whom we could share share eternity!
Ah, and I so much like these lines
"Love her daily non-stop
Go through pain and aganee as I watch her shop
Love the every ground she walks on
She’ll vacuum; I’ll mow the lawn"
Though so routine are the images you've painted - the power which they possess is just blowing me apart!
All the best to you!
Jan
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simply amaze me!!
i think i'm so late to comment with this beautiful hand made of yours.. it was totally romantic and sweet. love is like a sea wave
Floating in mid air like an air balloons
suddenly strike you like magic..you don't know when or how but you just find yourself falling in love.. haay... love is the precious gift that God gave us.. except for our life ofcourse. I enjoyed reading.. -
yeah, this was great, but i really think you should have done the ol' spell checker thingee by now on it. this was just full of sweetness and pure feelings. be prepared though for the REALITY of love, because as great as you make it sound here, it isn't. but then, maybe when they made you, they broke the mold, just hope you find that girl who fits the same description.
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WOW ANDREW GREAT POEM!!! LOVE IT!!! YOU REALLY OUT DID YOURSELF ON THIS ONE! well God bless love ya bro! AND YOU LOVE ME
lol bye
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This was a very very very very sweet poem... probabaly one of the sweetest I have ever read by a guy..
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this was one of the best poems I have ever read! it was amazing!! the emotion brings tears to my eyes... You are truly a great writer. You talent is beyond words!! Great Job!!
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Wow, what a beautiful poem you have here!!! You surely must have a huge heart as the way you write this poem here, wow! Amazing! TY for entering my contest and good luck!!
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wow this is a popular one huh?...lol great job on this, you may want to run spell check over this, not to be rude but i just want to help you out.. anyway thanks for sharing and best of luck to you in the contest...
take care
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A little love rain would be perfect weather
Every minute without her my heart will ache
Without her my hands would tremble and shake
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I love those 3 lines the most. You are just full of it hun. (Talent) .
This is the poem to show your new wife someday
She will cry when she reads how you ask God for her
God will surely grant you your prayer and send her your way
Never close your eyes, she is just a breath away!
Peace & Love
FifthDove
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i dont believe you can find love. i believe you will recieve love when you least expect it. my fiance greg, we met when i was a little out of norm(drunk) we started talking and we hit it off so we decided to be friends then after afew days he asked me out and we have been togather ever since. we do have things that are dragging us down, but we are both working our hardest so we can be togather. i can truely say that i love him with all of my heart and soul. and i hope you may someday recieve love. just be ready because when it hits it will hit you hard and it is very overwhelming!
LOYA,
CARRI
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This has got to be the sweetest poem written by a guy ive EVER read.
Pick her up when she fell down
One so perfect I’d have to crown
Awwww!!! Youre going to make some girl very happy one day. Youre a great writer and I can tell everything comes straight from the heart. You already have a million applauses but I think I can add one more Thanks for sharing such a brilliant piece!
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great poem!.. very awesome.. not too much i could say except i think if you broke your poems up they may be a little better.. great write though.. keep it up..Latears* Jessie
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I agree you are very gifted well done
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herd should be heard. If my love were a disease whom would it affect - i really enjoyed that line, i like the imagery. but otherwise another good poem man, keep writing!
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I love this poem, you are so very talented with a pen, keep the writing coming because you put your heart and soul behind your words with God holding the pen, great job.
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This is a really good one, also. I hope you find your true love soon and I hope once you do find your true love, you won't take it for granted; but you will appriciate it with all you have got in that big heart of yours!
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hmmmmmm
goood luck with finding the girl of your dreams...
poetically this had a few good points, the rhyming worked in places , um, your postitivity is great compared to most of the miserable bastards on here [ amongst which I unfortunately number myself..]
It's nice to be able to believe that everything work and yuh, " the meaning of your life/ is still unfolding.."...
no need to give up just yet, even if you don't get what you want...
ah well
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keep smiling, althougn I have a few questions I'd like to ask you at some point... -
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Very good poem I love it!!! -
love it
that's so sweet and u do have to depend on fate and God to send u the right girl to treat u right, she'll come around eventually, so keep ur eyes open, but dont go lookin' for love in the wrong places.kayla -
i hope you find love soon.... i've already found mine and it is the greatest thing in the whole world. good luck
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wow! exquiste! i loved every line. this is waht we all want from love,and when we find it we never let go. the line that got me was Every minute without her my heart will ache
Without her my hands would tremble and shake~ oh thats how i feel about my husband. i mostly write about him,i feel that way each and every day,as i kiss him goodbye when he leaves fro work, i ask the lord to watch over him while he's away from me and return him home safely to his family. beautiful poem him drewce! i have loved reading your poems they are outstanding! you are a superb writer and i love the messages inside your poetry. thank you for inviting me to read your work. it was a pleasure
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GREAT
only one word can describe this poem "LOVE!" I love it!
"Look deeply at each other for a while
I’d cherish every moment we spend together
A little love rain would be perfect weather
Every minute without her my heart will ache
Without her my hands would tremble and shake"
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you are such a gifted writer. You seem to flow from the heart and the words just come out beautifly. I enjoy reading your poetry. Thanks again for sharing.
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awsome
wow this is a really good poem -
the emotions on this are strong.it was a bit choppy and you lose the meter in a few places,but if you remember to proofread before posting,you will catch the mistakes you have made.why they take a bit away from the structure of the write,the essence of it is flawless.love was a bit overused,but it got the point across that way.the ending put the crown on it.you are a very talented young man and i hope you will post more and keep growing with it.
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i like this one alot alot ! it made me smile . i think your poems are really great so keep it up!!
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*remains speechless for the next 10,000 years
*starts to smile... then asks herself why she can't rhyme/write like this, and why she's never come across this author until today before!*
Absolutely brilliant. Not much I can say, well actually that's a lie, there's a lot to say, just gotta find a way of shrinking it down into something that won't be counted as obsessive! But first things first. I think that's exactly I want (but a guy, not a girl
).. Just someone to love, and someone to love me back. Although love is scary, and dangerous. I've had one too many bad experiences with it. And it hurts, and I'd just about given up with finding love. But you portrayed love in such a brilliant way, that I know I'll keep looking, and wanting. So thank you. I did get a few tears in my eyes, towards the end, but the smile which plastered my face stayed strong. It's such a lovely poem, and I wish upon wish I could write as well as you!! A few of my favourite lines are:
"To talk to and nothing more
Always lend my ear to listen"
"I’ll just leave things all up to fate"
"Love is a lovely word
It’s the best thing I’ve herd"
Apart from it all, they're the lines which really stand out and mean something to me. I would say there aren't enough words to say how much I like it, but that's not true, there are, just not enough minutes in a lifetime for me to say it.
So, well done. I hope you do find your true love one day, and I hope she'll be perfect for you.
Keep smiling
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hmm.. i thought that this was basically a good poem. It seemed a little choppy in some area's though, and i didnt really like the repetition of the word "love," i thought you over did it a bit. but over all it was a relatively good poem..
"ld on to each other so very tight
That kind of love where you can’t sleep at night"
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Ahh, this is so sweet! i just love this line!
If my love were a disease whom would it affect
Original and beautiful , it's great the way the last two lines kind of change from the whole poem. Lovely poem and i hope you find someone soon!
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I really like this poem, it's great, i am going to let you know that you should enter this poem into the ~life~love~ poem that dolphinangel is doing
Great write
*Gabby* -
i don't beleive there are enough words in all of the languages in this world and more to describe how much i love this piece. it so vividly describes a relationship that i think most people would want to have, and it explains my feelings exactly. i think whenever you find your true love that you'll both be very happy with eachother and that it will really show. again, great write.
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omg...you made me cry. Obviously, with that said, you did an AWESOME job.
You have a talent for writing poetry. Something I don't have, I wish I had. But I don't. I'm glad your using it, and writing beautiful things. Not trashy, don't ever waste it, and keep it close.
You don't even begin to realize what you have, till its gone.
luv lotz
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i think you decribed the perfect relationship, the perfect mate, the one everyone is looking for....I cannot wait til my soulmate come but until then i guard my heart. Great write, i can relate to this poem so well.
Always Forever,
Nic
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This is another great poem!! love the rhming also but i.m with soul-shifter i need a longer attention span!! i sort of got through this great write!! Jacqui
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Your words really speak to me. I've felt like that soo many times. I feel like that even now, in this moment. I can't wait for God to show me who the one for me is. Sometimes I don't how much longer I can wait. I just want to be loved and love so unconditionally that it hurts. The hole that's there because I don't have someone, it hurts.
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Long. Couldn't finish it. It's so not my territory that I am touched by what I have read. I need to get a longer attention span... Jeez. Oh, by the way; your spelling is, once again, broken. Last poem I read was worse, though, so don't feel bad.
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Spoken from a poet who writes love poems, this intrigues me greatly. It reminds me of pieces I have written, such power, such concentration on the topic. The only thing that threw me off was the repetitive use of the word love, but, that's surpassed by everything else. After all, you can never have too much love.
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Very Sweet And Romantic
Wow This Is Amazing...Wish I Could Find A Guy Like That. Seems To Many Times I've Been Left Broken Hearted After All Of That Was Promised. Keep Writing You Are Amazing And Good Luck To You Whomever Your Girl Maybe! She Will Be A Lucky One Indeed! -
yeah, very cute. everyone's looking for love..i've learned to stay strong and dont search for it. love will more than likely find you when you least expect it. either that, or love yourself..you dont need anyone else, lol. j/k.
peace love and blood,
Goddess -
you are so right
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This is a very beautiful poem. I hope you find this girl one day. She'll be lucky if you love her the way you say you will. Your very optimistic and probably rather innocent. But it's still a lovely poem.
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Prettyful!!!!!
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Very beautiful
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great poem....i liked it...i hope you find the one you love, one day..and maybe there is some one out there for every one...^.^..~kat
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excellent
This is an awesome poem, very well written. I just hope that you don't mess things up with the girl God sends to you. Think about it... if you lose her you may not have anyone left. Good luck to you.
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What you were trying to say was very nice. I saw quite a few mistakes this time. Were you in a hurry? Please go back over it slowly and read it out loud and look for your errors. Once they are corrected this will be another magnificent poem.
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that was good....i liked it, and there is bound to be someone out there for you or that you fall in love with..just hope that she also falls in love with you too! or else it really suxs, trust me i know how that is and it aint fun....but anyway it was really good
"I could learn to respect"
i'm not sure i really like this part though b/c with the one you love you shouldnt have to learn to respect them, you should just naturally respect them.
it's like on "The wedding singer" (if you've ever seen it) when linda comes back and says, "well i wanted you back and i can learn to deal with the fact that you're not some famous rock star." and robbie/adam sandler says "i dont want you to learn to deal with it" or it goes something like that...but idk to me it just seems like when someone says they can learn to deal with it or learn to respect someone, its like they have to and with love it should just be..you shouldnt have to learn to respect...ya know what i mean? and dont take this offencively b/c it's really a great poem that's just what i take that line as...you probably didnt mean it that way but that's just how i interpert it...so yea.... -
awww this is so sweet...sometimews its hard to find true love but im sure you will find her or get her eventually- great write with true emotions and a nice flow--great job
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Drewce, I really like these lines...
I’d love someone who I could learn to respect
If my love were a disease whom would it affect
Great job, love is a difficult thing sometimes, but worth it. Aimee -
aww,this poem is so sweet.I hope you find that special someone
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great!
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This is a very sweet poem full of innocent optomism that hasn't yet been dashed on the rocks of heartbreak as it enevitably will be, I'm sorry to say, as it happens to us all. As for
One so great and rich in beauty
Save the brightest one for me
The sooner you learn that looks are decieving the better. Beauty is only skin deep, seek out someone with a beautiful heart and they are more likely to be your soulmate.
Several people have already mentioned spell check and you still haven't corrected typos, if you need help just give me a shout
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This is really good. and really sweet. I hope that u are able to find that girl. but neway, the poem was great. keep writing
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GREAT
This is a very very sweet poem!! i hope you do find that one girl who loves you and who you love back maybe one day that girl will be right under your nose!! keep up the very very goood writing and good luck!!!
lovealways
niki
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This was good and close to my heart. I am going to tell you what I have been told many times: Be Patient! It'll happen eventually and don't rush it either, you have the rest of your life to find love. Great work!
Megan -
wow i really liked this poem. it is so sweet.. God will send somone for you. just wait.. anyway. great poem. made me cry .. (but only a little)
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As a few other people said, spell check. Very important. Other than that, this piece is so sweet and so well written. Romantics are good...we need more of them - women definitely go for that...I hope all your dreams come true and you find that one true love - I'm still kinda searching myself but time will tell if this relationship is it Keep writing!
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That's a great write - I'm absolutely sure that someone with such a pure outlook of love and what it can give to you, will have no trouble finding the right person one day. It can take time though - I started looking at 16 but didn't find him till I turned 22! Worth the wait though
for you
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YOU CAN LOVE ME!!! HEHEHE jk ok that one really good too yeah it has a nice flow to it>
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This is a very sweet and thoughtful poem. Nice job with it. It flows beautifully. You have a very big talent
~Kamilah -
awww this poem is so sweet and awesome! thank you so much for sharing this poem, its very good! you're a good writer keep up the very good work! take care and God Bless you
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to me, love is an illusion. i say this often because i find that its very true...
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As was pointed out, use the spell check, we all need that! I see you have a talent. Let God guide you.
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I REALLY LOVE IT ARE YOU A ROMANTIC YOU ARE THE SAME AGE AS ME DID YOU KNOW THAT?
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Excellent
This was so awesome again. You have a true talent and your a great poet. Welcome to AP!! Its a lot of fun. Anyways back to you poem. Great flow and great expressions of faith. This touches my heart because a lot of guys I know don't want to wait for the perfect one and certainly don't want to have God pick them out. I live in a place where a lot of the teenagers and young adults are into partying a the time... Great job. I hope to read more from you soon.
Godslittleangel -
Very good indeed. I see you wrote another since you IM'd me. That is good that is good. Very creative with writing down what you feel. Your poem flows nicely and tells a story as you write. A hint - before you save it read it over and correct any spelling errors and it will show up perfectly the first time, but you can go to the top of the page and edit it so don't worry. just open up on your poem and at the very top you will see the (edit) section. I see you are new so I thought I would share that with you
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aww this was sweet, pretty long but it did say everything you could want in a love, this was very sweet, sometimes you do make your own destiny. I liked this!
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There are some typos, but the worst thing about this piece is the cliche subject. I rather prefer the negative side to love, since I've learned it's really the only side that exists. Sorry to give you a bad review. It's nothing personal. I agree with angelscryblood-- I hope someday you find somebody. And I think you will. Again, sorry.
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aww very sweet poem. i hope u find somebody who u'll love! i noticed one or two minor spelling errors though (aganee instead of agony) but apart from that this poem was very sweet keep writing
xashtrayxgirlx -
This is a beautiful poem.Love is the greatest thing one person can find.I hope you find someone very speacial to your heart.
Great write.
~Crys
The girl magnet -
past form of 'to hear' : heard
'herd' is a synonym for 'pack' or 'group'
trick -
tastes like sugar. and a pinch of pink dust.
trick -
10/10 not a thing i would change
this is great. awsome and i totaly loved it. you sound like you deserve a girl who feels the same way, i hope you find her soon cuz for me "love" is a pile of shit. lol. im just havin a bad day dont mind me. grreat write and have fun on ap.
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Love is really a lovely word
It is the best thing that I’ve herd
Overall, when push comes to shove
I really hope someday that I'll fall in love
So many people in this world deserve my love
But to find a person who's sent from above
Who I would love and she’d love me back
Which emotions of love do I lack?
The day when I need to love is so near
To be there for her through every tear
I’d love someone who I could learn to respect
If my love were a disease, then whom would it affect?
To keep it honest and so kindly pure
This person would be my cure
Pick her up when she fell down
One so perfect I’d have to crown
I'll Love her daily, and non-stop
Go through pain and agony as I watch her shop
Love the ground that she walks on
She’ll vacuum while I mow the lawn
My love to love her is love indeed
To find this girl is what I need
To be her friend every night and day
That she’d love me as I love her, this I pray
Hold on to each other so very tight
That kind of love where you can’t sleep at night
To watch her laugh and to watch her smile
Look deeply at each other for a while
I’d cherish every moment we would spend together
A little love in rain would make it perfect weather
Every minute i'm without her, my heart would always ache
The time I spend without her my hands would tremble and shake
A fair friendship is what I really long for
Someone to talk to, and nothing more
I'd always lend my ear to listen
I hope nobody walks in on us kissin’
To hold her everyday in my arms
She would be my good luck charm
I wish I find her and find her quick
Send me the right one, God, you pick
One so great and rich in beauty
Save the brightest one for me
Love to love her is love indeed
To find this girl I need to love is what I need
Love for me I think can wait
I’ll just leave things all up to fate
I just corected spelling and added a few things i thought would add to the flow. You dont havwe to change your poem, maybe just take notes to learn from
I think it was great, and sounds like you had fun writing it too. Welcome to poetry
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its good, but am i allowed to correct it 4 u?
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awwe! That was sooo cute! I loved it! awesome job
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That was sweet, i kinda feel the same way. you deserve someone most defintely.
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Awww, this is so sweet. I loved it. The whole thing is so great. It flows really well, I thought it was really cute. I hope you don't have to wait too long, because it seems like your someone who could really deserve love. ~~Mandy
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