Prayer in schools, in society is under used
Instead of God’s love; guns, violence, sex is on the news
‘This just in: John just gave his life to Jesus after a lifetime filled with sin”
What’s wrong with the world we’re living in
Magazines, video’s, the Internet pleasuring teenage boys wicked flesh
15-year-old girls getting pregnant, what a mess
Passing laws for gay marriage
…Next comes Charlie in a baby carriage
10 year old kids picking up guns and killing other little ones
Serial killers tormenting and doing all just for fun
Daughters crying in pain while daddy takes them out back and begins to rape
Pleading for someone to help but they find no escape
Kids having the nerves to shoot up schools
Just wanting to break all the rules
Girls prostituting their self no matter what the age
Prostituting them self no matter what the wage
Terrorists dropping bombs
Doing it all for Osama or Saddam
Ask yourself why isn’t love what you demonstrate
Why every other poem on this site is about hate
This world’s treated me like crap, everyone dislikes me, my ex did this and that
Why do you think over seas we’re still in a combat
We’re killing this world with every move we make
Poisoning our air, you could die with the next breath you take
Even though life passes by so fast
Let’s let this world we live in last
Or we could keep living this life the way that we do
You know, it’s only our children’s children we’re trying to bring through
Author notes
Once again I hope this don't offend anyone! And I know I already have. Write what you feel but have a positive attutude. No hard feels? God bless
Written April 5th, 2004
A contest entry
- loads of choices and great fun!!! *UPDATES* by nats21.
300 points, ended April 29, 2004, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Ps I 2nd JLynn-4God's comment!
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Hi there. This is amazing as the last. You simply don't find people who can write like this anymore. As people 'so call mature' they lose the ability to think like this, and to feel like this. I hope you never lose it. You were made to be a preacher- you have a true heart for God. I am putting you on my daily prayer list.
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this is wow amazing and 100% the truth you grabbed me with the name and the pom is even better your amazing writer and you wrote it so perfect!! i wish the world could read it!! so they could have a realaity check!!
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Yeah, but I think yours is wayy better than mine, you are more detailed and just brilliant. You touch on so much honesty and truth if someone doesnt like it, its probably because they cant face the truth. Great write!!!
~emily~
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Fantabulous..ChangeTheWorld..AWordAtATime!!!
Awesome...powerful...true...real...these things go on...and everyone just complains..but doesn't really do anything about it...this write gives us a feeling..that we should do something...before it's too late...or at the least change our attitudes about how we percieve the world...you've picked some hard subjects to relay here..and we've all been exposed to those things...deep..sad in a way..but touching...interesting free verse structure..and the rhymes flow just right...great poetry..and wonderful expression...God Bless you...
Bugs & Fishes
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RollyPollies & Me!
~Glet
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Thank you GOD. Its people like you that go out and kill people and rape children you scare me
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WOW!!!!!!!!!!this is soooo true.i am glad you wrote this, it really is awesome.the fact that everything in it is true really hits home.i can't believe what this world is coming to.God bless
Brooke
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Good work Drewce...
Another brother speaking the truth and proclaiming the word of God...I will be praying for you...but I also encourage you to continue to speak what God gives you and how he gives it to you...no matter whether they receive it or not...the bible says some will accept and some will reject...but they are not rejecting you...they are rejecting the word of God...
I encourage you to begin to study the books of Jeremiah..Isaiah...Ezekiel...and Daniel...study these prophets....cause their words we not always well received...but God told them to speak anyway...
God bless you bro...I will lift you up in prayer...keep in touch if you need any upliftment (if that's even a word..lol)encouragement -
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Awsome job! It's great to finally see someone writing about change. You're right, most of the people do write about hate, when right now the most important thing is love, especially with everything that is going on in this world. You made me think about the way we live. Thanks!
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Good for you. Someone finally said it.
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This is powerful and just makes me speechless. All that you say is true. It is scary, but true. Thanks for pointing out the obvious to everyone. Thanks for sharing too. I know i write about heartache and hate and how i have been screwed over. But now i feel like an idiot for writing that sorta stuff. Thanks for making me think. -
I agree with Queenie, you can't please everyone. This poem/write here, though, just speaks nothing but truth. And those that are judgemental on this write, are just afraid of or denying the truth. What you wrote, is what can plainly be seen daily...in this screwed up world we live in. I liked reading this one because of just that reason, the raw , unsweetened truth. Excellent job in expressing such strong views and the emotions that follow. You've penned an awesome read, one that I will come back to often
~Aimee
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profound
can't please everyone,but this is a pleasing and very vivid outlook on the way things are happening today.the profundity of this is outstanding.this poem said things that needed to be said.no one should be offended by the truth and if they are,it's their own insecurities.let them stew. -
it's A Great Piece
As You Knew When You Posted This Poem You Were Bound To Offend Someone- And In This Poem You Said Some Vaguely Annoying Things.
I Suppose You Are Of A More Liberal Mindset Though So You Probaly Didn't/don't Care, But Your Poem Suggests That Every Other Poem Except Yours Is About Hate, or SOmeone Hurting Someone, Or SOmthing Along Those Lines. I Have Read many Poems Which Have Nothing To Do With That. Perhaps You May Be Reading IN The Wrong Sections For Hope, Love, ETC.? I mean, I'll Admit My Favorite Kinda Poem is Either Dark And Depressing, Or Just Dark, And That Just Happens To be my Style Generally, But I Don't Write Only About My Hurt, My Pain,- They Aren't My Only Feelings, But A major Part Of My Life. It's Okay To Think, Write Whatever In my Opinion, But At The Very Least You Should Include A Disclaimer Stating That You haven't Read Everything On The Site, Therefore You May Be Wrong In Some Of Your Musings. It'll Make Picky Weirdos Like Me Feel better. -
That was wonderful. I loved it. Truthful and encouraging. I loved it.
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Good poem, but I disagree with this line:
This world’s treated me like crap, everyone dislikes me, my ex did this and that
I don't dislike you
. Great work, though...keep it up! God bless!
~*~K.M.K.~*~
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GREAT JOB ..........
very ; VERY ; good.. you said it like it is .
you did a great job expressing your self .
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love it love it! IT addresses the truth. No one can stop the truth! Our world has tried to stop to many things as is! Good job GREAT POEM God bless
Love kisses and HUGS
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Awsome
Wow dude... Awsome, I love the the way you express your feelings in your poems. And I thank you for sticking up for what is right! Don't worry if others try and put you down cause they dont like it, just let God use you the way you have been! God Bless!!! I am going to promote this! -
Wow this is a really good poem about todays world! I'm so glad someone finally spoke and wrote a good poem on something that means a lot! I love all your other writes too!
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excellent
I love this poem! It is fantaboulous!!!
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Great poem but I just need to add that I would rather see a angry poem than someone actually confronting the other person. The world is a sad place but there should always be hope in the human race and in our God who created it.
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wow, good job, I mean, this kinda reminded me of a song, where is the love by blackeyed peas and justin Timberlake, I am glad that you are religious, alot of people aren't and i think they should begin to, it is a very amazing, and wonderful thing, to have god, to be by his side, it is amazing, great job, i will stop rambling
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Keep on preaching brother........AMEN!!!!!!!!!!!....I don't care what others say......They don't know me.....and they don't know you.......Let God flow from your heart and soul......Amazing......Keep it up bro.
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awesome write. and be afraid of offendin' people, some are gonna like it and others not. everyone cant be happy all the time and i like the way u just say everything and get it out there, dont be afraid to say what u want ot say. kayla
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Excellent
Yes you have by putting Gay Issues and Poets writes under the same category as something evil here.
Gays are equal just as you and I, and Poets write from the heart and imagination, regardless if it’s about an experience or something they are going through.
But everybody is entitled to their own thoughts and opinions, right!
But overall you really do have a very powerful write here! Keep up the great writes. Excellent write.
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Amen! Wow... this is a powerful poem! It almost made me cry... it is a very sad place that we are living in. You wrote this wonderfully! I think if you wrote a book will all your poems I'd buy it and read it all in the same day. Wonderfully done!
God Bless you bro,
Jenna
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