I fell in love with a girl I met a year ago
Love grabbed me and started to grow
Her lips, her smile
I know we are meant to walk down the aisle
Her look, her face
Makes me feel like I’m in a heavenly place
Her hands, her feet
Sexy legs no woman can beat
Her eyes, her hair
I can’t help to stare
Her intelligence, her brain
Loveness is driving me insane
Her body, her butt
Younger guys say “WHAT?”
Love and happiness has finally found its way
Tomorrow will be my 82nd birthday
Author notes
This is not about some old fart cheating on his wife just to let everyone know. My pastor said something about an older man falling in love so.........Love knows no age limit! And I don't know if "loveness" is even a word but who is the writer here? ME(lol)
God bless
Written April 23rd, 2004
(Brother) * I don't know if this is what you wanted for the contest but let me know if not
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Another funny write by you! You are an amazing writer. Keep it up. The funny ones are the ones I like best!
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i love it! absolutely love it! my favorite part was:
Her body, her butt
Younger guys say “WHAT?”
That made me smile, I literally heard lil john saying what in my head, and for that to be in a poem is awesome! lol
at first, i thought this was going to be a mushy gushy love poem that was going to depress me seeing how im dealing with a break up with a man ive been with for over a year, but it actually made me laugh a little. thanks a lot man!
P.S. if you havent already, dont forget to fill out the form from the contest page and put it on my author's page
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wow, what a wonderful surprise ending. Just great!
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LIKE IT!
I LIKE YOUR POEM! ITZ GREAT! N VERY SWEET!
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Love and happiness has finally found its way
Tomorrow will be my 82nd birthday
^^^ I read that and was like "wuh?" Then I read your comments and I got it. lol! nice job
P.S. I didn't know you were so old Andrew. Man, all this time. lol!
God bless,
Hannah
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almost random... but i liked it. the butt part made me giggle
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I like that piece of work
Not everyone can write the way you write
very nice
and thumbs way up
but don't forget to check on some of my poems. Any which one that make you happy. Since it is mother's day, I would recomend you to read unwanted wishes. Other than that, I think trading places is a masterpiece. It has to do of how are it can be if you were to wear someone else's shooes. It is really deep. If you have ever been hurt by someone you deeply love, this poem is for you. By the way, I have a lot of poems. The more you read them, the more you will understand how much creativity I try to bring to poetry. May peace be with you and enjoy . -
great poem, i love the ending. it's so great how you could write about how love can come at any age to anyone.
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Love is grand...no matter what age.
Check out my poem "Conversation of Ignorance."
Great job!
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Hey, if Lewis Carrol could create his own words (i.e. "The Jabberwocky"), then why can't you? When I read it, I thought it was just a typo and that you meant "loveliness"...and then I read your author's comments of course. I say, why not? But I'm rambling...so, I think you really got your point across...you've really got it bad for this person. The twist at the end that revealed that the subject was a senior citizen was delightful. It brought the hugest smile to my face. I hope to be that frisky when I'm 80! I really enjoyed reading this. Take care! ~HD
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that was cute
good job with the rhyming and such. It was really sweet to
nice.
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Excellent
This is sweet, love does not know any age limit! Great write, thanks for sharing and keep them coming! -
Heehee!
I thought this to be a great write and very cute too! 
Thanks for sharing, and dream, and live on!
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Ohh, this is so sweet. I like the word "loveness", poetic license my friend! The last line is great, it took a potentially cliche topic and gave it a unique twist. Love comes in all sizes, colors, and ages. Great write, God bless.
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This is an excellent poem i love it.. keep working.
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Cute.... but a very gross picture at the end. Some old wrinkly guy sitting a part bench trying to stare up a 15 year olds skirt. lol Keep dreaming in ink.
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hehe i liked it! i love the movies that have older people who dont realize or care if theyre old and fall in love...love is always the same no matter how old you are...but then again im just a sentamental chick ...but great poem!! keep it up
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Great Job
Great job bro.......LOL........This is awesome......I love to read your poems because they express you...in some way or another...because of your humor and the thoughts that you and only you have to show to us all. Amazing work. -
This was a great write and love can happen at anytime to anyone. You have a good rhyme scheme but I think you meant to say "aisle" instead of "isle". Nice job. Have fun. Steve
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DUDE this poem is GAY! That is grose, you make me think of the line in the movie, "Big Daddy." EEEWWWWWW them old wrinkly balls! haha just kidding love knows no age You did a goood job on this onne man!
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lol that was really great man! lol I mean....really....great...lol okay you made me laugh now let me stop!!! lol keep it rollin!! take care..
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Cute
This is Awesome. I love it....but then I love anything about love so...yeah. Anyways, very cute. I hope I'm still loved by someone when I'm 82.
God bless,
superswoman -
Awesome write bro. I thought this was really cool. My grandfather would always show us pictures and say that he was so inlove with his wife. She passed away a couple years ago... and it's hard when you lose someone you've been inlove with for so long. Aight went on a tangent... but this poem was awesome. You wrote it very well.
God Bless you and your writes,
Jenna
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I like this poem but i agree with sadelmann, I wasnt sure about the rhyme scheme, but thats just me. The subject of the poem is unusual and its refreshing to read a new perspective
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Sure - lust knows no age, either...scandalous...lol. I really liked the idea. i was a bit distracted by the lack of symmetry in the couplets - probably just me.
Scott -
Very nice poem. Age is only a number and we can fall in love at any age. Thanks for sharing.. Lori
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good
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great and loving write
I love it. you have such a beautiful way of writning your feelings. It is a beautiful write!
God is blessing you
With christian love,
Dawn -
good poem - loves good XflinchX
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This is so sweet.. I think it's enchanting when older people fall in love.. But to be completly honest with you.. (And I'm sure that's what you want) This poem reminds me of Anna Nicole and her husband... LMAO.. That's a good thing so don't be offended...
Faith
Trust
and Pixie Dust
Lilli
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i love this keep it up...
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ha, i loved it! i thought it was nice, i loved the form, i loved the rhyming. nice poem, i thought you really captured...er...something. good job.
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I know exactly what you mean I love my girlfriend shes great!! ahhhh yay for love.!!
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