Would you hear me if I screamed?
Would you only shout louder?
Would you tell me to be quiet?
Do you want me to hear you?
Would you hear me if I whispered?
Could you hear a whisper amidst the shouts?
Would you notice or would it be too quiet?
Could you whisper to me?
Would you hear me if I were silent?
Would you stop talking long enough to notice?
Would you take the opportunity to yell more?
Could you be silent for a moment?
I scream you’re hurting me, but you do not hear.
I whisper my pain but it goes unheard.
I’m silent and you don’t see my tears.
All you hear is your own voice shouting
Author notes
This is the sister poem to "See Me." It too is written from the perspective of a teen to a parent but could apply to an adult and many other situations.
Written June 23rd, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Parenting (Contest) by PeaceChain.
300 points, ended August 11, 2004, 25 entries
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Your sentiments expressed very well in this poem - makes an impact on one who can see themselves in this, I would think. Good write,
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I can only echo the comment by meesa p - spot on.
thanks for the entry and good luck
~Von~ -
I can relate to this one as well, as my daughter gets very frustrated and yells and most people see defiance. I see an urgency for her to speak at this moment and the need to be heard. Often parents forget that we have to teach our children how to interact with people and even as teens they do not know yet how to express themselves. Great point!
Thanks for entering! Good Luck! -
Hearing what your children say is a very important thing, alos knowing them well enough to hear what they are saying, but aren't really saying as well...lol... A fine write, thank you for entering, good luck and best of wishes... ~genielassie~
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I think that many ranges of people could relate to this... I can relate to it, and a little more than I should, as well. Great write... I really liked it.
Thanks for the comment on my lyrics!
Keep writing...
Kate
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LOVE IT! I really understand. It's awing (sp?). I think my jaw dropped when I read it!
Jen >_< -
That's exactly right.... it's not just teens and parents that fight and shout like this, sadly, it seems to be just about everyone. I think there are many that can "feel" this write, they can relate to this one. This poem, is exactly what I've thought to myself many times, while being younger and having my parents do nothing but shout. This write brings memories, and the thoughts I had thought so many times before. I enjoyed this write, thank you for sharing it Keep on writing!
~Aimee
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It hurts to feel "un-heard"... sometimes people just don't listen.
I found this piece touchingly sad.
Nicely written,
~ Wendy -
We seldom hear what others are trying to say, see what others are really feeling. We are thinking about what we will say next while the other person is still attempting to communicate with us. Maybe this piece will help people shut up for a few moments.
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yup...i can totally relate to this one...great write
~*catie*~ -
I really like your poem!! its soo good, and i can totally realte to it!! keep up the good work!
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wow.. i think i can relate! geeze.. this is a wonderfull.. poem.. your such an awesome writer! well with my mom.. latley shes been mean... and her words have been hurtful.. same with my dad... hopefully it'll get better again! but this is seriously a great poem.. i loved your words in this one! great job!
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This was an excellent poem, that spoke volumes. YOu last stanza was fantastic, and it neatly tied together the entire poem. You wrote many truths here, and I certainly can relate. I sometimes wonder what voice my loved ones would hear, or see...
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Great
I can totally relate to this poem and I really did enjoy read it. I'm one for rhyming schemes, but I did like your poem. It shows your angst to be heard but instead of taking a stand you're being drowned out again. I really liked your poem. Great job. -
melphleg~
Hey! I thought that this was a really good poem. It was nicely written and it had a good flow to it as well. I can't relate to it though. Keep writing and thank you for sharing this with all of us here.
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Again, another poem that is easy to relate to. Very strong emotions shown here... I unfortunately know what this is like. Talking doesn't work, silence doesn't either, everything ends up being shouting. It's not just teens who fight with their parents, obviously. Another good write.
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