You can beat my body.
You can break my bones.
You can heave your insults.
You can throw your stones.
Still
I am bold and I am free.
You have not broken me.
You can chain my hands.
You can put me in a cell.
You can leave me in darkness.
You can cast your spell.
Still
I am bold and I am free.
You have not broken me.
You can point and you can stab.
You can call me the fool.
You can try as you will.
You can push and you can pull.
Still
I am bold and I am free.
You have not broken me.
You can deafen my ears.
You can make me blind.
You can kill my body.
You can poison my mind
Still
I am bold and I am free.
You have not broken me.
No beating can break me.
No chain or cell can hold me.
No biting words can cut me.
No grave can keep me.
I am soul and I am spirit.
I am bold and I am free.
You can never break me.
Author notes
This poem could likely fit a few catagories but the one that is primary is "hurt".
I'd be honored if this was on the peacechain web site.
Written June 25th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- CONTEST: Perseverance by M.A.King.
350 points, ended September 22, 2005, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Amen! I have a poem on the "Peace Chain" it is a good feeling to know that others see our visions also
freda
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This speaks of perseverance against the harshest of adversity. Your refrains are strong and proclaim a steadfast endurance. Thank you for this wonderful entry.
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This is truly good and has so much emotion. It shows how strong you really are. Thanks for entering my contest, I really appreciate it, Good Luck.
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I really liked this piece well done..Reminds me of a mantra in a way..thanks for your comment too ...Helen
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Good evening sir,
I am finally compelled to read (and actually critique!) something of yours after many days of seeing your name in the who's online list. I have observed that you adhere without doubt or fear to your faith, which is a wonderful thing. I wish that I had half as much fortitude.
I do share in the glorious strength of this piece--it has shown that society, no matter what evils it tries to coerce upon others, cannot break all people. I find your work to be very inspiring, while most of mine are very melancholy in comparison. I have not always been a person of great faith, but seeing people who are gives me a goal to aspire to. Thank you.
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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Beautiful collobration
I love it I am soul I am spirit
Good luck in the contest
A wonderful uplifting poem
Hugs
Susan~~~
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Wonderfully done. Nice to see such a fitting poem for the contest. Very empowering and inspirational. Loved everything, the flow the content, the rhyme. Quite well done
Thanks for your entry and good luck!
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THIS contest was about how sorrow and strife has taken up in your life and how you worked it out. It tells of your faith, but it doesn't tell how things worked out for you....I really liked your work and your faith that you have applyed to the paper. I am not perfect, I really do appreciate good reading, good luck and I really enjoyed your work.
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This was great!
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say what? ??
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yes but what if i spat on your shoes after you had just polished them, i am pretty sure that would crack your mind into tiny little dreams that dribble insanity like a baby dribbles mashed food.
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yay!!! off to my favorites list you go! This was an amazing strong and uplifting write. Just the kind of thing I realy needed to read about now so thank you. I look forward to reading alot more of your work
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I like the cadence of the peom, and the affirmation of your spirit. It touched me deeply, because I belonged to a religion that tried to break me, and that is why I ran away from home. I wrote a poem about it:
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I've commented on this at Meg and Mandi's Bob but i think i have to again. You constantly amaze me with your talent and this poem is no exception! The depth of emotion astounds me. I wish you luck in this contest, you have a very deserving poem in my humble opinion.
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Emotional and Excellent
Great job. I wasnt in the best of moods when I read this but after I did it cheered me up a little. It reminds me a lot of how many people in this world are stronger then they think they are and that they can accomplish so much more then think they can. I dont know if that has anything to do with what you wrote but I think that in a way it does. You are a very strong writer and you can never be broken. An excellent write. Keep it up. - Sorrows -
Oops I thought I corrected that one. Thanks for catching that.
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Only suggestion on improvemant i can make is third passage down
"You can cast your spell"...rather than "You can cast you spell"...aside from that small thing...this was very well done...it had a very nice feel to it...thanks for sharing
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Yes, you may print it. I'd be honored.
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AWESOME
This is AWESOME! I love this poem you have here, you are quite a writer Do u mind if I make a copy of this & put it on my wall as a symbol of inspiration? I think this is absolutely amazing, and I can't help but apaulse it! Thanks for sharing, come visit me sometime & keep me updated on ur love interest, I hope that just like Paul, they can see that we truly love & care about them ---Sara
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splendid
Great write.To me it had a touch of Ghandi with a hint of Maya Angelou peeking thru. Good luck in the contest. Jacki -
i loved your poem.. it reminds me of what i'm ogign through right now... i'm the center of gossip right now, but i'm not letting it get to me... i'm not letting them break me... good poem.. nice job
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Ahh, I mean... it didn't make me smile because it was written about happy things, but because it was a great write. Heh, sorry if I came off as a bastard.
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Yesssssss. I LOVE repetitive poetry. This one made me smile, lots. It's very much like my own style, which is a good thing, because I don't find many people who use repetitiveness like I do.
Also.. IT FLOWS. Awesomely to be honest. One of my pet peeves is too many syllables in a line, so reading this made me happy. I think I'll stop reading poetry for the night, so I can leave on a good note. =]
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Brilliant
Brilliant!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
It's very enlightening and powerful. I wish you all of the best luck in your contest!
The ending just ties it all together:
"I am soul and I am spirit.
I am bold and I am free.
You can never break me."
A lovely job well done. The refrain is excellent as well, it's rhythmic -- what more can I say?
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Deeply Expressive!
WOW! the underlying meaning is powerful and painful, but it shows you have never been defeated. Very well written. We are all spiritual beings on a human journey, not human beings on a spiritual journey!
I loved this!
Prysmatyk -
good flow. I liked the imagry. a bit too inspiring for me though-good poem wnyway.
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Nice words.. This was very nice to read, and you did a nice job on this one. Thanks for sharing.
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This flowed so well. I love the last stanza, {I am soul and I am spirit.
I am bold and I am free.
You can never break me.} I am soul and I am spirit, that's an awesome, profound statement. The world can not touch what's within us, only if we allow it to. Enjoyable read and nicely written.
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I agree... it sounds better. Nice tweaking.
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I agree with you. I hadn't noticed having written this when I should be in bed. I really appreciate the catch. I like it better, having changed one word.
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It's a fairly unique poem, reminiscent of a poem that a friend of mine wrote a while back. The only negative comment I have to make is that the second to last stanza says "can't hold me" twice. It seems like thesaurus.com could solve that problem, but it's just speculation.
Anyhoo, good luck in the contest!!
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Good stuff on this one! While I was reading it, I kept hearing Ben Kingsley when he played Gandhi in the scene where he addresses an all-Indian assembly and describes the virtues of non-violence. And for that, I'm gonna applaud. Keep writing!
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Very Good
Nice Consistent Flow, Good outline, Nice imagery & description.
Well spoken, I can follow your meaning fairly well. Overall great work!
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